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Wed Jul 23, 2014, 5:03 PM
chloe says
i need an angel
with big white wings and skin
that shines like gold,
do you believe in angels, charlotte?

i say
the plants are all dead in here,
how can a plant
know something i don't?
and i'm not religious but the only time
i ever felt peaceful
was when i sat in church

luke comes in, and chloe says
luke, you believe in angels?

he says what, like them feathery dickheads
with halos and stuff? nah i don't -

then we sit and watch a fly bash it's brains in
on the window

and
i think
how strange
that it can't see what's killing it

and
i think
how strange

neither can we

(the plants are dead, but we are still waiting)

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Ariamay123 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014
This is beautiful, and it reminds me of Skellig by David Almond, somehow. Hope things get better.
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cassyme Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi my name is Charlotte!


I love your work, it's beautiful
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ChichiTrain Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Student Digital Artist
lol my name is Chloe (diffrent pronounciation tho) if my english is bad I'm sorry
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DoTheDinosaur24 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.i am christian but I won't say anything rude,because that was amazing:)
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ReynaNioma Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
Wow. You are an amazing poet. =] I enjoyed reading your poems. Even the goofy ones. Lawlz. Keep it up. =]
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SkylarkTheCat Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Student General Artist
This is beautiful
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Morticia-Lynne Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Student Writer
Beautiful work as always, stay strong <3
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mckltten Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hope you are alright kiddo, we're here for you. You can get through this, believe me.
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lunewhisper7 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
We're here to help you through this <3 
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
 Amazing poem. Write and take as long as you need. :hug:
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think it's okay not to see it, as long as I don't feel it. Then I can keep going on as if everything's okay
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fuzed-ice Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
Hopefully things will get better. Just because we cant see it, doesn't mean we cant do anything about it.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Take care of yourself, Charlotte, you're in my prayers.
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AnAwkwardBlue Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
The message, wow.  

I'll keep you in my thoughts.
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Deaths-Lament Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love it, that message of how we cant see what's killing us is beautiful
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Student Writer
This has a layer of reality some of your other works don't have. I'm sorry you've been going through such a hard time. Your writing is still lovely.
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
From the Supernatural fandom we send you Castiel, the sweetest angel ever to help you with anything! LOL  :heart: 

Lovely poem like always, btw! 5 seconds hug 
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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Edited Jul 23, 2014  Student General Artist
Brilliance. absolute brilliance :nod: i hope things get better for you :huggle:
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