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Wed Jun 25, 2014, 11:16 AM
what if
i get rid of everything -
one summer i found
a dead stag beetle
laying on the pavement,
brittle and crisp
dried out by the sun,
he must have thought
that he'd died and
gone to hell
the year i got hit
in the temple
with a hammer, hard
but not hard enough,
funny what happens
when you pull a voice
out of its chest
just because it looks
done, slick and silver
and only a sliver meant
what it said, i feel
deflated, i wish
i'd have known then
that in a couple
of years i'd have written
you off
as a bad dream, written
you off in a poem
or two
with the leaves and the
trees and the moon
as a fat white opal, sunken
into the wall that divides us,
the border from
my land to yours,
she is nothing but
decorative stone
to me -

what if all the dead
opened their mouths
and said everything
they wished they had?

(i saw the stars weeping when my nose bled)

Skin by Nobody
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014
shit man..this is real feels
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randompasserbyer Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I read that in a kind of bitter tone. It was kind of heartbreaking. 
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rainpeltkitty Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful.  I don't even have the words. <3
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Artaniss87 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014
Love the last stanza! So, deep and crude.
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JoePhilliacTheBlack Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
The whole last stanza was like an amazing, wonderful punch in the gut.
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Wolfgang627 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student General Artist
I hope you're doing okay. I'm always here to talk, and I'm not just saying that to be nice. I will do my best to help you if you feel like you need it.Huggle! 
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fuzed-ice Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014
I agree with haphazardmelody and  BloodyRoyalty about what they said. I'm sorry if the opposite of what they wish is true.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I hope you're okay. :heart:
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DireWolfwere Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love that last chunk at the end about the dead. I think there'd maybe be a lot of noise.
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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Just...wow...you're ability to write is just...just phenomenal, really :clap:
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your-first-boyfriend Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
For your sake, I hope the hammer part wasn't an anecdote. :O_o:
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student General Artist
This was so... Magical.
Just, wow.
All of your word choices are beautiful.
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AwesomeTheAmazing Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist
You have such a lovely way of putting events into poetry... mystical and epic.. with great personality..
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EnoughSilence13 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautiful! I love your poetry SO MUCH! It's the highlight of my day. :)
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