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Tue Jun 17, 2014, 2:23 PM
night stalks
through the streets
and tonight
he is collecting -

i lay my bones
on the pavement
evenly spaced, but
i know that he won't
really like this,
my spine whispers,
i think you need
to stand up for yourself -

you bottomless pit
of despair
you're hell
you're small
you're small small
small
enough to push
into that lake -
i am,
i wonder how much
rain i could fit in my mouth
before it's considered
half full, and
how many branches of the family
i could fell
before it's considered
all dead,
and the black
it starts in the top left
hand corner, i see it when i lay
on my bed,
it splits itself four
the first to my eyes,
my mouth, my hands
then my head
inside
on the metal, i lay
in the bath
i breathe out and i feel
myself sink

(they aren't quite clean enough)

Skin by Nobody
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ReyRay Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
So many people try to copy your style, Oaklungs, but I can always tell whether you've written it before looking at the ID.
I hope you know that you've got something so unique here that nobody can replicate it even if they try ^-^
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Wow! Very powerful!!
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rainpeltkitty Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is excellent.  Wonderfully dark. Keep up the good work. :)
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Silent--Songbird Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very dark, very good, but I have to say that I'm curious as to what your demons look like...
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014
i'll let you know.
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Silent--Songbird Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
=)
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randompasserbyer Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Probably one of the darkest I've seen you write! It's superb, though! It- It- AUGH!! No words! X_X
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mcckaja Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Dark but very emotional <3
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Artaniss87 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014
WOW!! I REALLY like this. It Is dark, deep and bloody awesome!!!!
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is very dark, but very emotional. Wow.
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PerishedPrincess Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so powerful. 
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Oldsoul-Mira Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student General Artist
i'm going to go cry in the corner and wait for my goosebumps to go away.
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randompasserbyer Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
heheh.. me too. Sweating a little... 
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student General Artist
*inhale*
...
.....
.......
*exhale*
did I ever tell you how much I love you Oaklungs? ;D
They can probably see you shining from space <3
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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student General Artist
now there's something i like to see, a poet who leaves me speechless and wondering. very nice job! :)
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MeiJing Featured By Owner Edited Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist
You should put all your beautifully-crafted poems into a book, so that people can buy it and breathe the goodness from it. "Eunoia" is the word I'd describe you - your poems puts me in a hazy yet calming dream that somehow ends at the last sentence.
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Wolfgang627 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student General Artist
I've been telling her to write a book.
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Wolfgang627 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student General Artist
*asking, not telling.
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BrokenRecord-Skip Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014
Beautiful as always.  
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