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Fri Jun 13, 2014, 7:13 PM
i hear
the sun hiss
when it catches
sight of the moon,
i see you too, so please
do not come any closer -
i crack words
wide open to see just
what they're really
made of, and i long
to do the same
to you, i think
a crowbar is the only thing
that would give you
a more open mind, i
swing then prise -
you laugh
and say
a moth in search
of the light
is bound
to get burned

(what are you in for?)

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:iconjeanclaire:
jeanclaire Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014   General Artist
love Love LOVE Love Xx
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randompasserbyer Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Love Playing with fire
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FruitnCreme Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Student Digital Artist
amazing.... ;-;
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LadyBitterblue Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I admire every single line... You, dear oaklungs, are just wonderful. Little Pixel Heart 
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
:heart: :heart: :heart:
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:iconstormsandswallows:
StormsAndSwallows Featured By Owner Edited Jun 15, 2014  Student General Artist
this sounds a lot like what i  need to say to someone
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:icon237-indefinitetruth:
237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Student General Artist
That genius use of imagery and metaphor, fused together seamlessly..
<3
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SilverPaopu Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
This is great! Love the images your words give off...keep it up :)
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:iconsilent--songbird:
Silent--Songbird Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the moths =) 
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Kitoria Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014
god the imagery <3 love this~
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love this, especially the part about cracking words open :D
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:iconwinter-oneechan:
Winter-Oneechan Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Student General Artist
Sounds like someone I know all too well.
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DireWolfwere Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the line(s) about cracking words open<3
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wickedcurly Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014

"i think
a crowbar is the only thing
that would give you 
a more open mind"

I love you. I really do love you.
only you could make that poetic.
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:iconlunewhisper7:
lunewhisper7 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Another beautiful poem from you ^^ Thank you so much for sharing!
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:iconjoephilliactheblack:
JoePhilliacTheBlack Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Perfect!
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:iconemperorike:
EmperorIke Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014
I volunteer
Get to it
hitting emoticon
^
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:iconoldsoul-mira:
Oldsoul-Mira Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Student General Artist
hmm
I know lots of people who are in severe need of a crowbar right about now.
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Artaniss87 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014
Amazing!! Love it.
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peaseblossoms Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love this - the metaphors are just amazing!!!! ;O;
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