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May 23


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Fri May 23, 2014, 12:28 PM
i unzipped
a cloud and climbed
inside it
like a sleeping bag,
the silver lining
on my skin
felt rough and itchy,
i want to see you
make this one look
please sew me up
inside and let me drain
out when it rains,
i will be birthed
again as water
for the flowers and the soil
down below -
i think i lost
my train of thought
when it smashed right
through my temple,
i lay on the tracks and wait
for what i know
it brings to kill me, and
i'd hate to be
a cat and have to do it
eight more times
to get some peace,
i think i'd pick
a fight with a
hungry fox,
drop down from next doors
roof into the
pond and
go sit in the road til she
calls me in
at night, what a fucking bore,
i'd like to know what
her guts
have to say -
and if i dont believe
in heaven
how can i be scared
of going to hell,
i used to hope that time
would tell
me but he won't,
i know he's never
really liked me all
that much anyway, always
ended up
taking your side -
and now i only sleep in the
fetal position
on nights i wish i'd
never been born,
and when i feel
like the bad blood
between us
might need a fresh coat

(painted over it, the stain is still there underneath)

Skin by Nobody
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undauntedifly Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Student Writer
This. Was. BRILLIANT! Keep it up! :D
fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the beginning and the end and everything in between. I love how visceral it is.
StereoDiamond Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Am I the only one who sang this? It was wonderful enough to be a song! I loved it.
taintedxblissx Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. I envisioned it so clearly. Very well done
ElwayGuy7 Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Holy. Fucking. Shit. Give her the Nobel Prize! This is the kind of poem I would read in English class when talking about poetry. The images, the flow of words, the quick segues from one metaphor/simile/image to another.... You really have a gift...
KareenaDeloris Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student Writer
I second that.
ReyRay Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*sigh* these poems are always a treat. Never stop doing what you're doing, hun, you got a gift!
SoraLove Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
:heart: I needed this today too, thank you! :heart:
Shirouyumi81 Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
So sad... I love the imagery put in there,it's good.
Myeengun-the-Alicat Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Student Writer
Absolutely gorgeous poem, and I love how the thoughts just flow.
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