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Fri May 23, 2014, 12:28 PM
i unzipped
a cloud and climbed
inside it
like a sleeping bag,
the silver lining
on my skin
felt rough and itchy,
i want to see you
make this one look
better,
please sew me up
inside and let me drain
out when it rains,
i will be birthed
again as water
for the flowers and the soil
down below -
i think i lost
my train of thought
when it smashed right
through my temple,
i lay on the tracks and wait
for what i know
it brings to kill me, and
i'd hate to be
a cat and have to do it
eight more times
to get some peace,
i think i'd pick
a fight with a
hungry fox,
drop down from next doors
roof into the
pond and
dive,
go sit in the road til she
calls me in
at night, what a fucking bore,
i'd like to know what
her guts
have to say -
and if i dont believe
in heaven
how can i be scared
of going to hell,
i used to hope that time
would tell
me but he won't,
i know he's never
really liked me all
that much anyway, always
ended up
taking your side -
and now i only sleep in the
fetal position
on nights i wish i'd
never been born,
and when i feel
like the bad blood
between us
might need a fresh coat

(painted over it, the stain is still there underneath)

Skin by Nobody
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undauntedifly Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Student Writer
This. Was. BRILLIANT! Keep it up! :D
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the beginning and the end and everything in between. I love how visceral it is.
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StereoDiamond Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Am I the only one who sang this? It was wonderful enough to be a song! I loved it.
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taintedxblissx Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. I envisioned it so clearly. Very well done
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ElwayGuy7 Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Holy. Fucking. Shit. Give her the Nobel Prize! This is the kind of poem I would read in English class when talking about poetry. The images, the flow of words, the quick segues from one metaphor/simile/image to another.... You really have a gift...
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KareenaDeloris Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Student Writer
I second that.
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ReyRay Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*sigh* these poems are always a treat. Never stop doing what you're doing, hun, you got a gift!
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SoraLove Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
:heart: I needed this today too, thank you! :heart:
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Shirouyumi81 Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
So sad... I love the imagery put in there,it's good.
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Myeengun-the-Alicat Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Student Writer
Absolutely gorgeous poem, and I love how the thoughts just flow.
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