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Sun May 18, 2014, 7:12 PM
hope you're
dead in a ditch,
cold hard hands growing weeds,
hope you drop your heart with your
keys and you can't get back in
to me, to the two marks you made
before that one,
hope someone smashes you
open pig and the air will refuse
to lift up your lungs anymore,
scurry away from your lips in the rain again,
hope you're still trying to fix yourself
with vodka and bare hands,
hope you learn that if you take someone
apart and expect them to put themselves back
together, they're going to have a few loose
screws at the end of it all,
and jesus christ i rip the grass up by
the roots at 3am because i'm cruel now
and not because there's anything wrong
with my grapefruit

(i know and know and know, only one i belong to is death)

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JocastaTheWeird Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
hope you learn that if you take someone 
apart and expect them to put themselves back 
together, they're going to have a few loose 
screws at the end of it all,


That's amazing. ;o;
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Shastadog001 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student Artist
This is short, sweet, and gets to the point of how much u can hate people for what they did to you. I think this is an amazing way to give a big fuck you to people who changed you for the worse.
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RemmyFox Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Student General Artist
sexy
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Natureisnatural Featured By Owner May 24, 2014
"with my grapefruit"

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What's that supposed to mean?
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Owlshirt Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
I sincerely love you now.♡
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OrangeWithATopHat Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ah, this reminds me of my feelings for this guy I used to like a couple years ago, who found out I liked him, and physically and emotionally abused me. I'll never forget that.
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Peyton-the-echidna Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Oh my God, that is dark!! O_O
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XEverSouldarknessX Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student Writer
This is how I feel with how much I pissed off my ex today
And I'm a total prick for doing it.....this is karma
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Pepsi-CoIa Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
i know that feeling ;;
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phantomwolfcatstuff Featured By Owner May 21, 2014
Harsh?!?
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shoppingtrolley99 Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Love it. This reminds me of how I felt/still feel about my manipulative and perverted ex. 
You're a brilliant writer. I like how emotive it is.
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dhxjcrd Featured By Owner May 20, 2014
Ah, definetely know the feeling and love this one :)
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pikawoo221B Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really liked this one! Great job :)
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the whole "FUCK YOU" connotation this poem has, though of course done much more graciously and strong! 
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someonesecho Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
hey, I hope you don't mind, but I kinda made a poem ( someonesecho.deviantart.com/ar… ) inspired by the emotion that sparked within me while reading this. I gave you credits, so...

yeah, hope you don't mind
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AsperKaos Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
I love all of the anger in this. Well done.
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slycooperfan Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
This is truly amazing. Very angry and full of emotion.
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mcckaja Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
<3
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inufufujesukristi Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wait...tell me about where the grapefruit comes into the picture???
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Student General Artist
Fucking awesome!
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AcidSpades Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
This speaks wonders.
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7thCuil Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is pretty fitting towards how I feel about a manipulative man who decided to cyberstalk me for years. Pretty dang fitting.
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vanilla-vanilla Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
I like this... And it vaguely reminds me of a tune by a local band around here... www.youtube.com/watch?v=WvHL9R…
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DireWolfwere Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how violent and angry this is, but it's still elegant and full of lovely metaphors.
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