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Wed Apr 16, 2014, 5:27 PM
a mother says to her son
can you feel the world lodged
in your rib? do not tell
me you can't, it's right there
and let's not tell god
anything about this, let's give
him the silent treatment like
he's giving to us,
sometimes i wake up wanting
to shred myself into ribbons
tie me up in a bow and send myself
to your doorstep with no
return address and let you deal with it,
you're not listening and you're not
understanding, you're too busy
trying to read all the text, but
i can go days without speaking
one word, got a habit of holding my
breath diving into my own mind
for hours, blue bottomless pool
river veins with the bones of a dream
drifting through, some stuck on the
banks all dried up and thirsty, this
shark tooth reminds me of you so i
press it in hard, still not one single
drop, a baby raccoon floats by with
no life but wide eyes, i know you'll
pray the horned god sends him
straight to the sea, drown him out
with that voice that says maybe
next year when you search for
yourself, you won't just be
facing dead ends

(the gate at the end of the garden is barred)

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:iconkitten-demon:
KITTEN-DEMON Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
Hate it sorry but I can't give the silent treat meant to god D:<
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xVeRvAiNx Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
Beautiful.
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nightcrawlerfan19 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student General Artist
Interesting.
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Shirouyumi81 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
My gosh,sir/ma'am,you have a really powerful way with words... I can really make a connection with this.. Nice way with words.
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SasukeTheHotty Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
DAMN! that was powerful!
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:iconaquashadow3:
AquaShadow3 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist
((Shit. This is powerful.))
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:icondeathbustereudial103:
I had that happen once. It took ten hours of surgery to get it out of my rib.
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:iconsilent--songbird:
Silent--Songbird Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
And give Him silent treatment...... :)
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:iconheymynameisremi:
HeyMyNameIsRemi Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And give Him the silent treatment, like He's giving us.
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:iconyumeih:
Yumeih Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're my creativity, you know ? Your words are flash of inspiration for me.
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DevarjunJoshi Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
I LOVE U MOTHER I LOVE THIS THING 
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:iconlexi247:
Lexi247 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
wow
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:icon237-indefinitetruth:
237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student General Artist
"...and let's not tell god
anything about this, let's give 
him the silent treatment like
he's giving to us..."
*Shivers & goosebumps*
Oh my...
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AmitielFatum Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
I wish my vocabulary was larger so I could find a better way to describe this other than "beautiful"...it just only describes a small portion of it...just...wow...this is awesome...
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:iconacidspades:
AcidSpades Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
Did you take writing classes? Or are you just this damn good?
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:iconthemidnightwhisp:
TheMidnightWhisp Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Probably just that damn good. ;)
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:iconacidspades:
AcidSpades Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
Hahaha yeah . I wish I could write that good. She's amazing.
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:iconthemidnightwhisp:
TheMidnightWhisp Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:nod: Same here.
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:iconacidspades:
AcidSpades Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
Hahahah I like your username! It's catchy
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:iconthemidnightwhisp:
TheMidnightWhisp Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
(': Thank you.
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:iconacidspades:
AcidSpades Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
You're welcome!
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:icondeaths-lament:
Deaths-Lament Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Jesus this is beautiful. You have an electric, almost addicting way with words.
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:icon237-indefinitetruth:
237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student General Artist
You, my good sir, have spoken my own thoughts but better.
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CoffeeVulture Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student General Artist
agreed
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