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Mon Mar 17, 2014, 2:53 PM
my bedroom
suffocates me,
so sometimes i climb
out the window and
curl up on the
roof
instead,
there used to be a tree
down the side that kept his
arms open for me
but he said i don't think
you're ever gonna know
how it feels to be
midas
or medusa,
you know you've
already got a heart
of gold and eyes
of stone

i said now
you
don't get
to touch me

(i can drop down into the alley from here, or sit with the cat like a gargoyle)

Skin by Nobody
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This has some truly gorgeous imagery in it.
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Stealth250 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
Love your work😍!!! Waiting till you upload the next drawings! Can't wait😊
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tylerp1991 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
well sAlD
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AiRKlover Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's beautiful! I love your works because sometimes my life is perfectly described by them ^^
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helenadoodle Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
nice :)
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love this, particularly because of the talking tree. And also, your endings are always always clever.
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student General Artist
How many synonyms for "scrotum" did you use today?
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goodiesbasket Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Professional Writer
you're always amazing!
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Saihai Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm not sold to the writing, as much as the concept and the idea. The small letters and gritty font is fine, but thats just visual. It's the Medusa and Midas, the heart of gold and eyes of stone, and that same contrast,  that makes my heart feel very big in my chest. 
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Strange, it makes my heart feel small and quivering.
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Darquesse12 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
me too...
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TRUE-ARO Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
As a writer how do you keep yourself from hating your work?
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
You don't. All writers hate their work.
if they're poets at least
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Not dedicating yourself to it, would be my answer, but I'm a little loony. So, if you can't find anything else at all, consider thinking on that... I guess.
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TRUE-ARO Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I dont follow what you mean by not dedicating yourself
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Write the story down as you are forming your thoughts would be good, and then never daring to edit it. Really, never improving or thinking about what your works mean is the most horrible way to do it, and that's what I really meant. I prefer hating my works than never editing them.
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Mialily333 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
LOVE IT!!
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DRA3X Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student General Artist
you're work really fills me with these old shattered memories i can't seem to fit back in place holy sugar--
never stop writing, you're simply outstanding at it <33
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AcidSpades Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014
Your writing always gets to me. You're amazing at writing
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JoePhilliacTheBlack Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
I feel this should be set to music, somehow. ^_^
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jeanclaire Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014   General Artist
oaklungs i think i love you!! 
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your lack of punctuation is almost always annoying. I can almost never seem to get any true meaning out of it because of how you form these poems. For instance,

"but he said i don't think (is this stanza alone in some way?)/you're ever gonna know/how it feels to be (same dilemma)/midas/or medusa,"

You seem to have a lot of cutoffs that seem unrelated to the subject that I'm interpreting the piece to be, and nothing that's grammatically related to explanation. This may be just me, but it's somewhat straining that you never capitalize anything, as if it's better that way. All of grammar is a tool of language.
I suppose that you could be connecting this use of grammar to something greater, but it seems like a pricy expense.
And, especially since this is the Internet, it's hard to know whether or whether not an artist's "mistakes" are intentional. I will hope for honest clarification from you, as I am an always slow-learning writer.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
All of grammar is a tool of language, definitely. But would that not also mean that the lack of punctuation and stanzas themselves make a statement in oaklungs' poetry? Just my two cents there.
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I've considered that.
That probably sounded smug, but I did say something about that possibility in my comment.
"I suppose that you could be connecting this use of grammar to something greater, but that seems like a pricy expense."
Also, oaklungs could just not care about grammar, and that says something about her.
But I must say that I'm sorry to potentially offend you here, as you were kind with your thoughts.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I wasn't offended, merely wanted to offer my opinion. I do feel that sometimes a lack of grammar and capitalization is sort of a trend that poetry can take...but I don't think that's her intention here.
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Fladdermusen Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
I understand your point. Although I myself have a hard time understanding why poetry should subject itself to the rules of punctuation and grammar (I think a huge part of poetry's charm lies in the fact that it can flow freely and does not need to conform and make logical sense like prose needs to do), you point out something in oaklung's poetry that sometimes buggs me as well, especially in the line you quoted ("but he said i don't think"). It's in cases like that that the reading of the poetry becomes strained and almost confusing as one sentence some upon the other without any warning (I first thought the 'I' was the narrators 'I' and not the quoted tree's 'I'). I suspect it's a style-thing, but it would be interesting to hear the writer's own thoughts behind the writing style.
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I think a lack of "correctness" in anything can be good, so I hope nobody thinks I'm being a Grammar Nazi for no reason, and you not being completely offended by me is quite comforting. I'm often not liked for disagreeing in the manner that I do.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
You are not a slow learning writer, you're not a writer at all.

poetry is expression. It is found more often in the heart of a redwood sapling than in the most literate human in existence. Poetry is emotion.
not grammar.
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I should explain myself further here. I can enjoy words that are nice, soothing and playful to the ear and mind's imagery, but I don't consider that as poetry. From oaklungs, I get a vibe that she's doing something more than saying her utter feelings.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student Writer
Ah, well I guess we have a different interpretation.
she's a poet. Those are her utter feelings.
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hmmm. I guess that, on some level, you are right. I am more of a philosopher, and less a writer, but I use poetry and stories to, not only express myself, but more importantly, tell the world of morals. In an English class, you are taught on the importance of meaning, moral and theme in writing. I'm somewhat educated in the field, and this is something I'm not moving on. Grammar is an important storytelling aspect, just as much as oaklungs use of metaphor.
Poetry is more than an image and a feeling: it's what it means to say about these two things.
For clarification, I will give you an example of grammar comedy. "She's a girl," you could say about a brutish woman, or, "He's a girl." It's incorrect, but funny, and it portrays something in a more fun, "simple" and useful way. Grammar is just being clever with the structures of sentences.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student Writer
Exactly. Lack of grammar is part of her style, and if you browse around dA, most of the best poets' don't even capitalize their i's.

including me, although my poetry isn't really special.
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
Don't lie to yourself. Your poetry is beautiful and I would wear it like the rain in my hair if it ever came down out of the sky.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
</3
thank you
but unless you want dead swallows building  nests in your hair i wouldn't recommend it.
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Student Writer
=D Thanks, I'll take your advice
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Student Writer
:D you picked the right choice
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Not capitalizing an "I" is quite poetic in itself. It draws from the importance of you, and in not capitalizing "I", you are showing what you consider yourself to be. As an awfully somewhat abundant event here on dA, I think it says something, and it may not simply be that people think that they're not godly.
Also, as I read some of your poetry, I enjoyed it. It wasn't exactly what I'd call profound, but it all felt personal in some way, and it was refreshing. So, I dare to say that your poetry is special, even if it's just a teensy bit.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student Writer
. I'd agree. Nothing's ever simple, is it? And thank you for your honesty. May I ask what you meant by refreshing?
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What I meant by refreshjng was that your poetry gave me new perspectives on things. It felt as if my mind had been opened to possibilities on subjects I once thought to be ridiculous and nearly cliché in their use.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student Writer
Really? Huh. I've never heard that before. Can you give me an example?
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
Please please PLEASE don't do this. Don't criticise this unpeakably perfect work in such a way. This is the most beautiful poetry style I have ever had God's blessing of reading. What you have done is the equivalent of saying a comic with its humor based entirely on satire is not funny because it is not a knock knock joke. If this is not your thing, go find poetry that is a knock knock joke and enjoy that. Do not mess with that which you do not understand or enjoy. This poem would not be beautiful with capital letters and puncutation. It would be caged. This poem would not be beautiful with out cut offs. It would be boring, predictable, a path of daisies where life is soft worn concrete, broken. It is not oaklung's fault that your interpretation does not match hers, however she is the creator, so your interpretation does take the backseat. Please, don't criticise with your keyboard. Do it in your head, and if you want to ask an honest question, try to make it kinder.
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your-first-boyfriend Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's a pathetic mindset. 

You're basically saying that only the opinions you agree with matter and that everyone else needs to shut up. 

Just because OP interpreted something differently doesn't mean their thoughts don't matter. By saying to "not mess" with things they "don't understand or enjoy" you're basically telling them to be conformist- something poetry tends to go against. :roll: 
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
No, I am sorry, this is not my intent. When reading the comments posted, I feel as if this is an attack, not a clear, though out opinion intended to help. I don't see why people need to criticise something harshly if it does nothing to harm them. This is my opinion, and maybe I need to shut up =D so thank you for telling me, but what I wish to say is that when posting something, please think it through so your message does what it is intended to do. Just telling someone you don't like their work does nothing. I apologize if I came across as harsh, please take it as an example of what I am (obviously failing) to strive against.
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry that my bluntness has upset you, but I'm not very appreciative of how this has been responded to. No doubt about it, oaklungs is very good at making words that are beautiful and meaningful, but I want her to tell me either a) "My mishaps aren't mishaps, they are purposeful", or b) "I messed up, I'll elaborate." Truthfully, I hope it's all purposeful, 'cause that would be--according to my twisted logic--most philosophically fun; in this case, at least.
Alas, my interpretation and your interpretation on grammar are different, where I don't see it as a restriction. And, it seems as if you think I'm tainting this poetry simply by my presence, but I hope that's not the case.
One last thing: I don't believe--if there is any one being such a person here--that I am the victim.
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
Yes, I believe you are correct. You are the victim. I apologize for my harsh and quite unnecessary attack on what I believed to be your attack. I did not think before I wrote, I over reacted, and I am sorry. Please forgive me. I have become an example of what I hate. I misinterpreted your meaning. Will you forgive me?
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No, you misunderstand. I paused and then continued my last sentence. I was saying that I'm not the victim, and that I don't think there is one. I don't ever take intentional pity upon myself.
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
Eh, misunderstanding or not it was wrong for me to flip out so badly, and though I continue to disagree I apologize for being horrible about it.
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh. I thought you were being completely sarcastic. I accept your apology. I truly hope you aren't that sorry, though. It feels kind of wrong to accept your apology, though, because I could have been a little more kind. I need to be able to understand the dA community better to really be a part of it.
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
Well, now I feel better. I thought I actually hurt your feelings =P This has been educational for all sides.
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purrcatory Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
im pretty sure it's just a style thing
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