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Sun Feb 16, 2014, 5:33 PM
she said i spent
nine months on this
work of art, and now
it's just
destroying
itself


(it's tearing through its own beautiful canvas)

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:iconminako2119:
Minako2119 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My my......
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:iconblackace-of-spade:
BlackAce-of-Spade Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful.
:D
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:iconred-werez:
Red-WereZ Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, that was deep. That was a blow! But its really beautiful little piece of writing, emotional. :heart:
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:iconartsusaurus:
Artsusaurus Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
NO OMG 
But what if that 'work of art' was really trash? What if it really deserved to get scrapped up? What if it wasn't worth getting sad over or saving?
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Artsusaurus Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Okay, sorry guys, I do understand the meaning I've just been through some rough times and I haven't been feeling well
mentally. Forget I made that dumb comment, this poem is truly beautiful
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spacefvck Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
,,think about it,, what takes nine months for a woman to create? every one of those 'works of art' are worth it.~
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:iconkat-katerpillar:
Kat-Katerpillar Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
Ummmmm..... If you understood the meaning, you would have really not said that.......
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:iconleopardlings:
leopardlings Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
im not sure if you understand the meaning
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:iconprettyprincess45:
prettyprincess45 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Student Photographer
Beautiful I love your work
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:iconlol-no-533:
lol-no-533 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014
so beautifully, sadly true
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:iconanimalhopes:
AnimalHopes Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
AUGH I'M SO DUMB HOW DID I NOT UNDERSTAND THIS BEFORE
That's...deep, to say the least. Great job.
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tenchibaka Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014
i am surprised people did not get this XD i knew what it was in the preview hahahaha, either way it is a nice poem dude
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:iconminnie-the-witch:
MINNIE-THE-WITCH Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Uff someone help me understand this!!!
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:iconkatleidoscopic:
katleidoscopic Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I think she's talking about a baby or her son/daughter, and his/her bad decisions are destroying him/herself.

Just my take on it... :shrug:
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MINNIE-THE-WITCH Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes I know, I didn't get to post that I did. I turned off my kindle fire HD and then I was like OH DUH!!
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:iconvivi-chuu:
Vivi-Chuu Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Oh...my gosh....it took me so long and now I've got it. This...this is deep, no joke. Wow :iconclapplz:
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:iconshinseinasenshi:
Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist

Alchohol... "fixatif" for the heart. ^_^

Very nice work.

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:icontoggetic:
toggetic Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
...wow, that hit me hard.
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:iconpachoofoosh:
pachoofoosh Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh my gosh it took a while to understand this, but after a few minutes of re-reading it, it hit me. It hit me hard. qaq 

Beautiful poetry, it's really thought-provoking and deep. <3
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myocsareawesome Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
Heart Heart Heart Heart Heart 
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Greeneyedleopard Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
When I first read this, I didn't understand it at all. I read it over and over and I still didn't understand. 
I read the comments for a clue. A deeper meaning...
I look again. 
It suddenly hits me.
"Oh"

It truly is deep, isn't it?
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:iconkaipon:
KaiPon Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
This hit me harder than I thought it would.
Fuck, crying.
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:icondixsy0000:
Dixsy0000 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
Wow, just wow <3
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:iconhaphazardmelody:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This... :heart:

This hit me hard.
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:iconanila73:
anila73 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
and then she blames herself
it has nothing to do with her but she doesn't know who else to blame

(i hide)
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
why do you hide?
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Snivyshadow Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Holy shit, that hit like a tonne of bricks when I learned the meaning (Or at least what I think the meaning is, I'm probably right but I enjoy being self-deprecative)
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I read this last night and I must have been half asleep because my only thought was "whaa...? Is the painting alive or something..? Was the paintbrush too sharp...?" :blush:

Now, in a more lucid state, I understand. As always your words give me shivers - so much emotion trapped behind those seven little lines.
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Jellyfishiez Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
...It took me too long to figure out the meaning behind this. 
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:iconiamoret:
iAmoret Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
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:iconimunchoncereal:
imunchoncereal Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
<3
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:iconpereyga:
Pereyga Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Impressive
Somehow I can put myself at the place of the self-destructing canvas ..
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:iconscribblingnooly:
scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Professional
...but what is beyond the other side of the canvas?
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:iconthebookofnights:
thebookofnights Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Professional Writer
No, I like the last line, don't take it away...
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
the last line will be staying.
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:iconthecheshercat:
TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think I'm going to need a folder in my favorites just for your writing, at this rate...
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XSilentxAngelX Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I agree with this! xD
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:iconthecheshercat:
TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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:icondirewolfwere:
DireWolfwere Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
oh :c

My poor mother; I am feeling very guilty about my self-destructive tendencies right about now.
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:iconlux-ex-machina:
lux-ex-machina Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I needed this right now. Thank you for existing.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
from the bottom of my heart, i hope that you are okay.
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:iconlux-ex-machina:
lux-ex-machina Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I am. Your poem just hit a spot that really needed to be hit. Thank you :heart:
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:iconphan5everx2:
Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
can i marry a poem
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:iconanila73:
anila73 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
what if on your wedding day everything had lines and words from this poems written all over them
like even the groom's suit and your dress would just be white with this poem all over it
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Holy mother of God
Yes
So much yes
If it was just all oaklungs poetry omg best wedding ever
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
You don't need the last line. It dilutes the precision and impact of a very powerful piece.
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:iconamenarae:
Amenarae Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I find the last line is just as powerful as the rest, if not more so by bringing the thought to a cryptic completion. The poem tells us the problem, while the last line tells us what she is watching happen to her work of art.
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
Exactly. The last line tells us what we should already have figured out for ourselves.
Poems are about showing, not telling.
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:iconpokepower888:
Pokepower888 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
How do you say words of majesty as if they were spoken by an angel?
I imagine all of your works written in golden ink.
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DragonLover4Ever Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This poem reaches a certain part in me and now I can't stop the tears...
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