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he points
to a crucifix
on the left side
of his neck

tells me he can end all
of your suffering
-

and i look at him
and i cross my arms, thinking
he can't even do this
and i asked him 'did that hurt?'
and he said 'yeah, it hurt like fuck'

i don't miss him
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh...
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EdithFinch Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is an amazing piece of art. I, as a poet, thoroughly enjoy your work and the subtleties you slip into your poems. Very well done. I can't wait to read more!
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JohnnyCade4EVR Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Whoa... This is good and strange and confusing in a wonderful way... Don't stop!
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Artaniss87 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014
Profoundly sad and beautiful.
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AcidSpades Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014
Wow... that's pretty deep.
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LaurynMichella Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I'm not usually into this kind of random poetry things, but this struck a chord. I love it! Well done:)
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JoePhilliacTheBlack Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Powerful, yet endearingly sarcastic... ^_^
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Naraka7 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014
A dead man ends no one's suffering but his own.
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Trent-Shadowdragon Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014
This is a "poem?"  It looks like a dribble to me.  What the hell?  Do I get to say something banal about my day, call it a poem, and get dozens of favs?

I sit down on the tilting chair -
Broken as so many other things are -
The hammer of the piledriver across the street
Beats in time with my heart
My head pounds in rhythm.
I wish I had a whiskey and a whore right now.
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anila73 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This isn't really criticism, this is just making fun of/complaining about free verse poetry. I'm not going to try and change your opinion, I'm just saying.
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