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i will swallow
that white pearl
on my tongue

but i'll open up
for no one
yeah i'm happy as a fuckin clam doc
will take them pills but
no more talking
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This.
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xComfortably-Numb Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
Nice poem, but if you aspire to be a poet, or any kind of writer, you should learn to capitalize your I's. If you're going to be passionate about anything, you should always adhere to established rules for that passion, unless the breaking of a certain rule is to make it stand out or to make a point.
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Myeengun-the-Alicat Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014  Student Writer
E. E. Cummings disagrees.
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DarkFaerieNyroc13 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Truer words were never spoken
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Eraezr Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I couldn't help but interpret this in a lewd manner :|
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ZombieToofer Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very profound and good metaphor. Bravo!
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Raw. Lovely. 
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mmv303 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014
Really nice.
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014   General Artist
I love your concision and power, great piece. 
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Artaniss87 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014
Soulful, and love the metaphor of the white pearl.
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