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i will swallow
that white pearl
on my tongue

but i'll open up
for no one
yeah i'm happy as a fuckin clam doc
will take them pills but
no more talking
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Cleft-Palette Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2014  Hobbyist
I've said before, whether couplets, singe lines or two words you knock me dead.
Sorry to say I wasn't certain between pills and sperm.
Of course the concept that someone could be sexually comfortable without being able to open up does/has/is - get/been/being used.
I personally also went pills over conversation. No capitals needed. Your work isn't about constraints or regularity.
Just my opinions.
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ebonykenkara Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I used to go to therapy...had many issues...family death, friend committed suicide, bullying, other things...I noticed that during these sessions, I didn't talk very much...I didn't want to.
...pills are not the answer...it's coming to terms with yourself by yourself, and if one does not want to let anybody in, then one does not have to.
Beautiful work as always
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This.
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xComfortably-Numb Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
Nice poem, but if you aspire to be a poet, or any kind of writer, you should learn to capitalize your I's. If you're going to be passionate about anything, you should always adhere to established rules for that passion, unless the breaking of a certain rule is to make it stand out or to make a point.
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Myeengun-the-Alicat Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014  Student Writer
E. E. Cummings disagrees.
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DarkFaerieNyroc13 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Truer words were never spoken
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Eraezr Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I couldn't help but interpret this in a lewd manner :|
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ZombieToofer Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very profound and good metaphor. Bravo!
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Raw. Lovely. 
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mmv303 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014
Really nice.
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014   General Artist
I love your concision and power, great piece. 
:heart:
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Artaniss87 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014
Soulful, and love the metaphor of the white pearl.
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absolutejackass Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Sounds like a suicide note to me.
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byteme40 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014
All Good!
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TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Edited Aug 14, 2014
The moon sets full on a pink horizon,
white sphere sliding down yet... no sun is coming up.
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Student General Artist
No more talkinggg.
(I used to be mute actually. Then one day it all slowly came back to me..)
This piece is especially touching Oaklungs.
Love you always black heart bullet 
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Student Writer
Kind of reminds me about the process of anti-depressants and other such medications. You will take them in and they are supposed to make you happy or pain free or whatever they may and regardless, in many hearts, you don't want them to because it is not really you (or maybe it is. . . who can say?). I am no expert, but many friends have taken many pills and they all generally have described their situation much like this. 

Now, as for the poem - brilliant. You have subtle grace and a conclusive (and potent) ending that goes so well together. 
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cocoart Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow. You know what, this is the first time I've seen a poem on the front page that I've actually really liked! Nice work - especially love how the font and lower case present the words.
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Questionmark86 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014
Cute
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Student Writer
Very well written, as always~:heart:
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DeviantArtist14 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Student General Artist
speechless
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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GreyRoseOfHope Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely love this.
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chichichichipndale Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sperm metaphor.
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sairey Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
totally thought this too at first
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konvic21 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
LOL i was like "kinky" myself
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e-hima Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
XD
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GreyRoseOfHope Featured By Owner Edited Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Not at all...it's about taking meds without talking about the problems that you're taking the meds for.
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CherylBlanche Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014
I never thought I could see a poem on that without it being crude.
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deadcancoil Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014
This is good :heart:
:love:
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fideIity Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014
^^
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Sharkitty Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
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