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i disappear
into love
today i found a small blue bear on the pavement, ears worn
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mnglXmplr Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2014   General Artist
magnificent
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2014   Writer
Don't we all.
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PandaTJ Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful
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kawaii-alpacasso Featured By Owner Edited Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I believe this is one of my favorite pieces of yours... it's so sweet and yet so heartbreaking.
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christiano2211 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014   Traditional Artist
:) (Smile) 
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Sharon320 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
:love:
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Artaniss87 Featured By Owner Edited Jul 22, 2014
Aww, sooo sweet!!! (disgustingly so, sorry!!!!)
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Edited Jul 22, 2014  Student Writer
Although I love your short poems, I feel like this is more of a statement. Your description has a lovely line and I'm super curious to see how it ties into the poem you've written. Perhaps you could elaborate on this poem a bit more? 
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
So simple, but what you say is so true and so deep.
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nicetints Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Student Digital Artist
explain?
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Well, I feel like falling in love is a scary thing, and it can feel like you're losing yourself, or disappearing. It's why it's called falling in love. And it's a complex feeling, which is what makes it so beautiful. And this poem is able to say that in so few words. :)
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nicetints Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Well that's a great analysis and all and I don't want to sound mean or poke fun at anybody but...it's only four words and to me, it explains nothing...unless there's any elaboration at all I might as well say

I like
pink cupcakes

Just an example...but yeah. I don't get the whole "four words= deep serious as hell meaning" because without a picture to go with so few, random words, or an elaboration, I just...yeah. I wanted to know how someone could see anything into it.
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Well, that's your opinion, and I totally respect that :)
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nicetints Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Thank you :3
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Noxe-ApplePi Featured By Owner Edited Jul 23, 2014  Student General Artist
It has to do with the word choice. "Disappear" provides a starting point to get the reader thinking - what is the context of disappearing? what's the reason? etc. "into" provides an interesting juxtaposition. When things disappear, you think of them as going out of sight - yet the word oaklungs has chosen is "into". This further arouses the reader's curiosity and interest, in addition to beginning to set a mood. "Love" is an abstract concept that also gets the reader to think - is it love for a significant other? for family? New love or old love? What's the connection between love and disappearance?

These four words aren't random as you said - only an experienced, great writer can convey a world of emotion or such vast potential for possibility and thought through so few words and only a 9th grader brainwashed by her English class can have her brain so rewired as to enjoy literary analysis this much more than normal people of her age. that's me ahaha. And because of this, you wouldn't need a picture because it would only tie the poem down. As for elaboration, that's performed within the reader's own mind, stimulated by the words of the poem.

Whereas your example, consisting truly of "random words" as you said, is too restricted. "Like" is neither as strong an emotion as love nor as broad. It only implies a general feeling of pleasure/attraction toward something. "Pink cupcakes" are also very concrete, leaving pretty much no room for extra thought.

It's just that to the human mind, abstract concepts are much more interesting because there are so many "ifs".
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nicetints Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
My example was that it was only four words. Four words can mean anything. I'm aware my examples is terrible in everything else. But my point is that I'm not really convinced... Oh well.
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Noxe-ApplePi Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Student General Artist
Length doesn't matter in writing; communication and meaning do.
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nicetints Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I didn't feel any of that. But if you did, okay.
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UzumakiAndrea123 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
I agree with you. I understand people have their own way of writing and the author obviously will have some meaning for themselves behind this, but I just don't understand how this is anything short of 4 simple words. I don't want to start an argument but that's just how I see it. 
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nicetints Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Same. I used to write. I don't doubt there's emotion in it. But it's impossible to connect without elaboration. I disappear? All right. Where have I gone? Is it good or bad? What else is it doing to me? 

I don't know, I feel anyone who connects with it may be trying too hard, but I could be totally wrong, and just "not understand."
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UzumakiAndrea123 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014
Yeah, I completely agree with you. 
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rainfreezer Featured By Owner Edited Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
just popping in but i think it also depends a lot on your own experiences
like if you haven't experienced love in certain ways or had certain situations with love, then maybe it would be impossible to relate to this poem
i don't relate to it the most, but i still find it nice in some way

hope you don't mind me saying this haha
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nicetints Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Student Digital Artist
nah, I understand
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DieterAK94 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Invisible to all
But her
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27GreenStrawberries Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014
True words
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WishDreamLiveDie Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014
:) <3
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Student General Artist
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