Although I love your short poems, I feel like this is more of a statement. Your description has a lovely line and I'm super curious to see how it ties into the poem you've written. Perhaps you could elaborate on this poem a bit more?
Well, I feel like falling in love is a scary thing, and it can feel like you're losing yourself, or disappearing. It's why it's called falling in love. And it's a complex feeling, which is what makes it so beautiful. And this poem is able to say that in so few words.
Well that's a great analysis and all and I don't want to sound mean or poke fun at anybody but...it's only four words and to me, it explains nothing...unless there's any elaboration at all I might as well say
I like pink cupcakes
Just an example...but yeah. I don't get the whole "four words= deep serious as hell meaning" because without a picture to go with so few, random words, or an elaboration, I just...yeah. I wanted to know how someone could see anything into it.
It has to do with the word choice. "Disappear" provides a starting point to get the reader thinking - what is the context of disappearing? what's the reason? etc. "into" provides an interesting juxtaposition. When things disappear, you think of them as going out of sight - yet the word oaklungs has chosen is "into". This further arouses the reader's curiosity and interest, in addition to beginning to set a mood. "Love" is an abstract concept that also gets the reader to think - is it love for a significant other? for family? New love or old love? What's the connection between love and disappearance?
These four words aren't random as you said - only an experienced, great writer can convey a world of emotion or such vast potential for possibility and thought through so few words and only a 9th grader brainwashed by her English class can have her brain so rewired as to enjoy literary analysis this much more than normal people of her age. that's me ahaha. And because of this, you wouldn't need a picture because it would only tie the poem down. As for elaboration, that's performed within the reader's own mind, stimulated by the words of the poem.
Whereas your example, consisting truly of "random words" as you said, is too restricted. "Like" is neither as strong an emotion as love nor as broad. It only implies a general feeling of pleasure/attraction toward something. "Pink cupcakes" are also very concrete, leaving pretty much no room for extra thought.
It's just that to the human mind, abstract concepts are much more interesting because there are so many "ifs".
I agree with you. I understand people have their own way of writing and the author obviously will have some meaning for themselves behind this, but I just don't understand how this is anything short of 4 simple words. I don't want to start an argument but that's just how I see it.
Same. I used to write. I don't doubt there's emotion in it. But it's impossible to connect without elaboration. I disappear? All right. Where have I gone? Is it good or bad? What else is it doing to me?
I don't know, I feel anyone who connects with it may be trying too hard, but I could be totally wrong, and just "not understand."
just popping in but i think it also depends a lot on your own experiences like if you haven't experienced love in certain ways or had certain situations with love, then maybe it would be impossible to relate to this poem i don't relate to it the most, but i still find it nice in some way