Nah, the meaning of your sentence isn't vague enough. And you need a punctuation mark for a title to underscore how brief, and therefore deep, your poem is. I will compliment you on not putting the whole sentence on one line, because a sentence without arbitrary line returns is just stupid. However, you have too many line returns. 2 or 3 words per line is what makes the deepest poetry. But don't feel bad. Even the author has a line with one word instead of the requisite 2 or 3, so even he hasn't yet fully mastered the enter key.
The sad thing is, stuff like this, which my 11 year old brother could write make it to the front page. I mean seriously, thats one!! sentence which isnt really meaningful and it does not even have a good title. I cant understand how people find this "deep". I dont even see Adele rolling in there. Also there are many artists who deserve much more attention. Artists who work hours or days on a piece and put much effort in their work. Aaaaaand then there is this one.
When I read this, I remembered a quote from a book:
"They cupped their wings around their happiness and called it a world, though they both knew it was not a world, only a hiding place, which is a very different thing." ― Laini Taylor, Daughter of Smoke & Bone