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you’ve got
a lion
inside,
a heart
full of
pride,
and you’re
not letting
him roar
some tongues
cannot be tamed
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Bryd013 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Well thought-out :thumbsup:
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ZombieCakeForThePoet Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is literally the most beautiful poem I've read in my entire life. Thank you Heart 
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christiano2211 Featured By Owner May 17, 2014   Traditional Artist
:lionoid: Lions and Tigers in Kenya 
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Meowcchiato Featured By Owner May 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ah, perfection of expressing potential and strength at its greatest 
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't usually like rhyming, but I just love it here. This is perfection.
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WishingUnderThatStar Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful :heart:
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Theoldgreen Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like this it's short , sweet and powerful . In a way it hammers home how with a few strong words with soul can be far more effective
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Firefang500 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
When the lion in me roars, you hope it's not directed at you, because once he roars, he comes out and pounces
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oldtiny Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
 i dont know, i just  know they got scared, thats kinda feeling, 
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oldtiny Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
because whenever i let my lion speaks, everyone will be  scared 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
what will they be scared of? and why?
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jmelisio Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist
Short, simple and STRONG!
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love this so much!
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KhaliaArt Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
This is amazing. Lions are my favourite animals, so.. I think I love yooou :love: :hug: :clap:
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ZachDoug Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
    I like a boy named Leo. So this is perfect.
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HinataKeks Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
So powerful. I just love it!
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AquaticDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist
This has really touched me and inspired me. :heart:
I love how you can take such simple words and turn it into such beautiful poetry. This really inspires me and touched my heart. :heart:
How this makes me feel, is unbearable. It really makes me feel exactly this way. :heart: All I can think about as i'm reading this is letting him roar for the first time! Amazing. :heart: Keep it up. :thumbsup:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
thank you so much sweet pea :heart: this message means a lot to me.
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AquaticDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist
I'm glad. :aww: 
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AkiraTheBrave Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You write the most amazing poetry, whenever I'm finished reading there's a pleasant feeling in the air.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
this is a lovely thing to hear about my writing, thank you so much :thanks:
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AkiraTheBrave Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aww, no problem! How do you ever reply to all of those comments? I would never be able to pull that off!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
i really can't sometimes! i try my best to reply to the majority of comments and messages, but sometimes i let them pile so high it's just not possible. and then i end up feeling terrible about it :( but i've been trying to keep on top of them recently, so i don't get too overwhelmed, haha :P
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AkiraTheBrave Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Good luck!
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slycooperfan Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
You know you are an amazing poet when you inspire others to create art.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
:faint:
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
Bless you
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MixedSunlight Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
My tongue will never be tamed.

Neither will yours!!!!!!!!! Love your poems!!!!!!!!!! :iconairpunchplz:
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Velveteen-Vixen Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*Roars*
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Pigeon-Butt Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student General Artist
Sounds like my tongue..
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MoonLightDaiyz Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
Lol, almost like Katy Perry's ROAR!
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mohethedreamy Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
more like Emeli Sandé - Read All About It
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Nienilovescats Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
How can you let it roar when it has no flesh?
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DevarjunJoshi Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
but one cant hold that lion for ever some day or the other its gonna break out.
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Thatgirlontheinterne Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Artist
What about this?:

you've got 
a lion
inside,
a heart 
full of
pride,
and you're 
not letting 
him roar

sometimes
it is bad
too;don't let
him out too
early

but,when
the real
time does
come,do
it,and 
face all
of your 
greatest
fears

you might 
just learn 
something
from it



Sweating a little... 
 
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
I think it's beautiful. :heart:
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:iconthatgirlontheinterne:
Thatgirlontheinterne Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Student Artist
Thank you! :)
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
No problem. :)
-Elizabeth
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Dimitian Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
Don't fear your roar, but know when to use it.
A mighty cry can win fear and respect.
A meek whisper can save a life.
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ReubenDeFlash Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Writer
if I did, he would destroy everything.
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I've come upon a sad realization. I think I'm better, or more, than these thoughts of yours. That I'm done with these subjects and that I've learned all I can from them. It seems like my body wants me to move on, I suppose.
I'm currently wishing that I was sorry for that, but only by a small amount.
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Saihai Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Maybe the lion of yours should be kept silent as well. 
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, that's some fucked up shit you just said at me. My "lion" is not a constant.
Really, that does hurt. I just said something pretty damn personal and powerful for me and you come with this simple solution, but it's not for me. It's for you and everybody else that should be of a certain vein.
I'm not gonna torment myself in such a way. I have thoughts, and, fuck you, people are gonna hear them, and if you want me to hope that they hate those thoughts, fuck you again.
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Saihai Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I absolutely do not want you to stop sharing your thoughts. If I only wanted polite and smart people to open their mouths, I would never have replied to your comment. And please don't think that people hate your thoughts. Not all of them, anyway. Hate is such a strong word, geez.
I've just noticed your frequent comments, and I thought that this one was particularly demeaning. So you think that you've reached a higher level of aesthetic knowledge? I hope you have. But don't use it to belittle oaklungs. Your tone just pissed me off, and I love to express my negative feelings as well.  

And don't fuck me. Just don't. 
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I was angry and what I said was harsh, but I don't apologize for it. It was, actually, kind of horrible of me to be so vulgar.
I was saying that the problem with me and how I responded to oaklungs' poetry was that I thought I was better, and that was not, in no way, a good thing. I can always benefit from people and their perspectives on things. I was being somewhat of an asshole, and you responded to me like somewhat of an asshole, and so forth.
I'm sorry that this kind of encounter has occurred, but I must say that I find some of your comments to also be somewhat rude. Being blunt and straightforward with a person isn't necessarily a bad thing. You could blame me for not being able to understand who you are, in your entirety, as I could do the same to you. I think that we've mistaken each other's words, but maybe I'm wrong.
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Saihai Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Maybe, maybe not. Maybe we're both assholes. Rude honesty is my specialty. I'm not sure that's a bad thing. But I know that I'm not sorry of this encouter. It's been nice 'talking' to you Nate. 
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Dusklupe Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Indeed. Deep and complex yet so very simply put. You many have an inkling of your impact now but... Do you ever wonder how many people's buried yearnings, lost dreams and forgotten memories you stir with your words? I can tell you now, mine have been stirring for a while now and this only makes them swell to crush the rising breath from my lungs. Thank you for your words, no really, thank you. I need the reminder. I think we all do. Please carry on.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
this comment has moved me, and that's all i can say. i wish i had more, but i just... i'm speechless. i still find it hard to believe that my words could have any effect whatsoever, and to hear this just blows me away :heart:
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Dusklupe Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014
:aww: Heh. No problem. I know what you mean. Often times I don't want people to tell me the good that I do for fear it might change me, or the way I do things...or the reasons why. But here on dA i think it's needed where writers need more recognition and encouragement. It hard work to put forth the effort in all genres of the arts but for a dA browser it's easier to look at a picture than read words. I commend all of us writers here on dA who are still hanging in there despite the tendency for viewers (sometimes including the writers themselves) to pass up magnificent prose and poetry simply because they (and sometimes even fellow writers) don't want to read.

Also, I meant "You may have an inkling...' not 'You many have an inkling'. Sorry for the typo. Typos are trying to take over the world! Nuu 
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Rema-Alkhany Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Nice
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