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one day the earth will dim;
the light in the sun will flicker and die,
and the moon will sigh and roll over,
keeping her back to the world

our shadows will say farewell
to our bodies, and go their own
way in the darkness
yeah, dunno
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bitteryetsweet Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014
This is kind of awkward to read for some reason. First, The Earth becomes mellow. Then, the sun loses its shine for no reason, and the moon's just like, "WHATEVER", and rolls over to bed or something like that. But nobody cares about the shadows, so they left! D:
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely. Keep writing.
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DragonTygress Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"and the moon will sigh and roll over, / keeping her back to the world"
Lovely personification. :3
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Beautiful! Thanks for sharing your amazing poetry!!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
thank YOU for taking the time to read it! :tighthug:
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
:hug: :heart:
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful, just simply amazing :lovely: Wow! I don't know what else to say...
Except, that I look up to you as a fellow poet c:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
i love you <3
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww Bunny Emoji-10 (Loved) [V1]I love you too :iloveyouplz: 
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Nestharon Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014   Writer
How ironic. This reminds me of a prophecy that the scientists came up with when the "world was ending" in 2012. They said that Earth is going to have two suns and our shadows will disappear, we will not have shadows. Funny if you ask me...
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Pokepower888 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Cratered stone
Shuns the shadows
Because she has
Her own dark and
Light sides

Melted away,
Our black reflections
Sneer at who
They really mirrored
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Morticia-Lynne Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student Writer
Such a strange image, yet a beautifully depressive one. Stunning work as always.
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excite1338 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
+1
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DarkestDawns Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this, the imagery is perfect!
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Adonael Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like the personification of the moon :)
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dalmation1080 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student Photographer
Love this so much ;)
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innoctemn Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
very deep, in truth.
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Rikka16 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Hi, Satan, how are you today? .__.

Other than that, it's not bad. This can have different meanings, depending on how you view it. My view was that the Earth died completely (hence why I said Hi Satan. dx)
Gives you something to think about, y'know?
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dalmation1080 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student Photographer
Really don't know hwo you get "satan" from the earth dying?? o.O
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Rikka16 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
Feels. .__. I wasn't calling the earth Satan, I was calling you Satan cuz that hurt the feelings bad XD
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dalmation1080 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Photographer
.No idea what your saying
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Rikka16 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
Never mind...
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dalmation1080 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Student Photographer
okay then
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VictorHugo Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
you just spoiled the last episode of "Babylon 5"!
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Cassidy-Carlile Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I absolutely love this.
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poetryprince Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
didn't take long to realise that this was a perfect analogy to what parents feel when slowly, knowingly, loosing a child to illness or drugs, etc......

often couples emotionally turn away from each other after loosing a child, even though they sometimes stay together, their "shadows" "go their own
way in the darkness",
the darkness being depression and anger and sorrow

"
the moon will sigh and roll over,
keeping her back to the world"
, meaning everything that was touched or reflected the intense light an beauty of the sun will pale and all will seem less beautiful and will seem to give up, and turn it's back, and lose hope in the world, and no longer bring even a tiny light to the darkness of the world.

but that's just one interpretation of your great writing, good1

it could be a child knowing their parent usually die first and having similar feelings.....

or a husband and wife.....

or personification of the end times .....
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MarBryer Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Cute
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Fluffy-Sweety Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
very cute. =^_^=
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rookiez-cookiez Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
love the last verse
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AlrikN Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Dark, sigh how beautiful.
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You don't know your own genius, love.
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TreeWyrm Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Well that was lovely. Also makes me remember I had an idea for a story (one I'd love someone *else* to research and write!) about the end of a galaxy, the setting of the scene on the leaving of a message in an attempt to record all the life that was, at the ending of the last stars, the last habitable worlds, the last accessible energy sources, and the final knowledge of the people who were left (whatever race they may be) who know they cannot flee anywhere else across the vastness of space to the next galaxy... Something like, anyway. Your poem is the closest thing I've seen so far!
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FoFaFie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
... a bit depressing but pretty cool.
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treeclimber411 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student Photographer
beautiful :)
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lightfaith0606 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Still lovely!
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DaisyNova Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Tranquil and melancholic, it really stirs up some sort of feeling in its readers... I love love love this.
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Mizu-Hi Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
I don't know if this deliberate, but the first letter of lines in second stanza formed o-t-w and, well...the world is pretty much on the way to its end.
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ny-mets-girl Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
So beautiful, i love, love it!! You write the most beautiful poems love!
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LeafNinjas951 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
It seems like, well, similar to the Book of Revelations in the Bible. Somehow... 
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AuburnLogan Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
This is the deepest thing I've ever read! Love it.
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TheBareSheet Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student General Artist
elegant.
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HPartaddict Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist
I like the way this isn't pictured as very destructive or tragic...it sounds almost peaceful, like somebody going to sleep
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a-la-douce-memoire Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Professional Writer
I absolutely love this.
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Imriel87 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I must tell you this is amazing!! Can I use it for a cosplay skit of WoW in the future? It would be perfect and of course I'll give you credits!!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
thank you very much! of course you can :tighthug: :heart:
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Imriel87 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
<3 You're great keep up the good job :)
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Aochiro Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student
Aww I was planning to write a poem with this exact concept. ;__;
What was I thinking? Jotting down these ideas I know will never be good? Yours is far better than any words I could have ever said anyway.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
never say that! please still write your poem :(
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Aochiro Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Student
It's still a work in progress...thanks for saying I should still write it though:huggle: But, what if someone says I copied your idea? I can't prove that they were my own true words.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
well if it's my poem they might think you copied from, i like to believe they would be the kind of person that would let me know, and i shall set them straight about it if they do :hug:
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