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and like a stone at
the bottom of the river
or the sea,
i think life might just be
flowing right past me
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RisingBlush Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2015  New member Hobbyist Writer
Heart Heart  so relatable and beautiful.
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sairey Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
Tinsy bit confused here. You're comparing your life to a stone at the bottom of a river, saying it'll flow past you... but the stone doesn't flow, the river does. Confused  
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michi-iyo Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
no, the author is the stone, life is the river that flows right past.
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
Okay, okay, got it now. 
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Morticia-Lynne Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student Writer
This has a oddly charming rhyme to it. Gorgeous work as always.
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deadcancoil Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
:heart:
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instantr3action Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
this is fantastic. great job.
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Laura-Loup Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
And like a bottle lost
In the fury of the sea
Or the ocean
You feel small, lonely
But your words reach me

<3
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Nestharon Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014   Writer
This is quite honest and creative. The message that it holds should inspire many, but as you said:

"i think life might just be
flowing right past me"


Shame how many people experience this and they don't do anything against it...
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:icondeadcancoil:
deadcancoil Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Does it matter if one does anything against it or not? .. I mean, Really... truly... in the end... does it change the ending?
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:iconnestharon:
Nestharon Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014   Writer
If you don't try, you will not find out.
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:icondeadcancoil:
deadcancoil Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Dangerous situations are sometimes better left alone ;)
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:iconnestharon:
Nestharon Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014   Writer
For those who fear the change. But you know, it takes one man's courage, to give birth to a wave of opportunities. If you know what I mean :)
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JoanMystique Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow.... powerful once again.

Just a question, does the metaphor of stone represent drugs?  (I.e. "stoned," but that may have been just how I interpreted it)
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Pokepower888 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Should I go
and be swept
away by the
waterfalls 
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:iconvanshira:
Vanshira Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
or stay
until I am worn
to sand
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Pokepower888 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh, that's good ^^

Dust fragments
Of who I was
Tumbling, tumbling
I didn't take
The east path
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Vanshira Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
(Did you mean "east path" or "easy path"?)
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Pokepower888 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Easy path whoops ^^;
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Pinkey-pie-69 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student General Artist
I never really had a plan
But maybe, one day,
I'll be picked from this place,
and thrown very far
to live with the stars
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Professional
..and eroding me
every so slowly,
so permanently.
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Invisiperson Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That was deep. Love it, man.
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Professional
thankyou :-)
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ReubenDeFlash Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student Writer
Ouch. Yes.
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Saihai Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
And yet you are surrounded by it. A stone might not know whether it's surrounded by air or water. 
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wishingdreams Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I was wondering why this was on the front page. But after I read it; this little bit of words holds a lot of weight.
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Chibirin4 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014   General Artist
Too true...
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appa-appa-away Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful. Lovely. 
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Nico-Di-Angelo-fan Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Where do you get all this! Wow, amazing.
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ocean-whispers Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014   Writer
this flows really well -- i love it. :)  it's beautiful. 
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Kalhiki Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist
I hear ya...
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annafuru Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
True. very, very true.
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shep4life Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome
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PhoenixFlamesRising Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
It's both comforting and unnerving how much of a chord this type of sentiment strikes with others. The feeling that life is passing one by, and leaving you behind with unfulfilled dreams/plans/passions. It's as if we're an entire race of unfulfilled people. Perhaps that's what keeps up moving forward, however; never feeling quite satisfied with life as it is?

You sure have mastered the ability to say a lot, and create much subsequent reflection, with short bursts of well-crafted words. It's very admirable!   :)
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meowkittycat478 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
This is all too true, before I know it I will have to work and worry about supporting myself. Don't we all wish that we could stay in childhood forever?
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Bonniemarie Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014   Traditional Artist
Really simple but powerful. Its a helpless feeling.
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3moCupcake Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This was beautiful c:
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DRA3X Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student General Artist
i couldn't help but sing this
it holds such a wonderful eeriely silent rythm
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The water will erode your crust.
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AcidSpades Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
I love your poems so much. They're short and sweet, but hold so much meaning. Like every time I come to deviantart, you're deviations are in the popular 24 hours section, (Which my deviantart page is on), I mean. You are so talented and gifted.
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InsecureWriting Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I feel this way a lot
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm. Exactly. I feel like my life is passing me by sometimes. And I don't understand why I'm not lifting a goddamn finger to do something about it.

Sometimes, it's better to swim against the current. What if the current leads to the rapids?
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I have thought that last sentence myself already .. Sometimes it feels like that
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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student General Artist
take the weight off and flow with the current
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
i'm afraid that if i do that, the current will take me somewhere i really don't want to go.
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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student General Artist
You can't let the weights drag you further into the darkness, you can't let your fear keep you down here.
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