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some thoughts get so loud that
you cry out for them to leave;
they scatter like birds startled
out of their trees, before landing
again where they were

and after a while,
you just have to
let them sing
it's half past three and i'm
laying in bed and
they don't give a fuck who they shit on
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chainedheart977 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2014
yep, nights are horrible
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Rai-Laurel Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2014
"and after a while,
you just have to
let them sing"
____________

Or cackle. Sometimes it's hard to tell which.
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xsakurakisux Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
 ;_;

i don't even know what to say so i'll leave it as that cx
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leyghan Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Fuck yeah!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my god yes. This poem.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014   General Artist
i feel them feels :heart:
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SciroccoStorm Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
very poignant
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artbyfieldsofsage Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful ... and very positive.
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Amazing imagery!!
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Morticia-Lynne Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student Writer
I know this feeling all too well, every time I close my eyes I hear everything I don't wanna know over and over and over again until my mind melts away to sleeping.
Gorgeous as always, and I love how such a dark idea is represented by such a 'free' creature as a bird.
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is my favorite I've read of yours so far. :) 
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srinath-ste-v Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah that's a beautiful thought..
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kissablyliterate Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is flawless.
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
your description is jokes : D hahah
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AwkardnessHarbinger Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014
I might sound stalkerish, but I wish I knew you, seriously :3
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014
aww you don't sound stalkerish lovely! just uber friendly :tighthug:
i promise you aren't missing much!
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AwkardnessHarbinger Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
Thanks ^^ but I wouldn't mind finding out by myself ;D
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Tygriess Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist
Amazing poems... now only if those thoughts were to quite down..
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jaelise Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Professional Photographer
Love all your stuff!
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LittleAprilFlame Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
A beautifully composed realisation of just how relentless the human mind can be - if only these 'thoughts' were as melodic as a birds song
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Daruqe Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student Digital Artist
If this is secretly about people flaming your emo poetry I'll be so happy.
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nerdytf84fan Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student General Artist
beautiful. So beautiful. It's so simplistic yet complicated and it expresses so much with so little words
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DRA3X Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student General Artist
-lost on words-

holy sugar this is just--
so
sad
and
i laugh
i laugh because its sad and its true
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mmv303 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
Keep it up!
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EnoughSilence13 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
You're like this wonderful river of creativity! I this it's so cool that you can write like this and be inspired by the things that can be so bitter. It's super awesome. :)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
aw, thank you so much! :blush: i like to remind myself that the bitter feeling is good for something at least!
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EnoughSilence13 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
*think. Sorry. I typed too fast.
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shep4life Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent poem
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'm so sorry you're having sleep woes. Been so very there, and done that countless times. I feel your pain. You tell your thoughts to just shut the fuck up so you can get some sleep, but sometimes, they just won't listen.
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RealizingRealitee Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thought provoking with a taste of bitter humor. Enjoyable as always!
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ReubenDeFlash Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student Writer
very relatable!
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TehAngelsCry Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Professional Interface Designer
Beautiful poem, really captures what I feel when those horrible thoughts take over my mind - and it's ALWAYS when I'm trying to sleep as well!
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keitone Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oh this is soo sad and so relatable :'( I love the similes you use!
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The horrors of one's own mind are seemingly endless. We find beauty in pain, and maybe it's because we feel that the people who feel it are learning from it, but I doubt that most of us think that. I think it makes a good story, or even a good poem, and we praise art, regardless of whether it truly speaks to the deepest horrors of ourselves or it is simply "Fun Time with Words."
Even if I don't relate to the poem, I can understand it. I always provoke the thoughts which grow in ferocity.
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Aochiro Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student
Wishing you only sweet dreams for tonight:) (Smile) 
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chasingcloudbursts Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm sorry. Here's to hoping they scatter long enough for you to sleep.
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Nico-Di-Angelo-fan Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I just love your poems! They bring light to my day!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
i'm so glad they can brighten your days! :heart:
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Nico-Di-Angelo-fan Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
 They can! No doubt about it  : )
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't understand how you find such perfect imagery every single time. Teach me your ways ;w;
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night2dusk Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
There's something really wonderful about this even if you're being shat on.
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chinoise56 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you.... this is so thoughtful and inventive.
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