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you're afraid
to let anyone
stoke the fire
in your chest
for fear
you will burn
them alive
well
don't be
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Jasmine-Jean Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2014   General Artist
Your thoughts put me to shame and I'm in awe again, more of this, thanks
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SvalaW Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a really beautiful poem that touches me deeply because I can relate so well. I used to be like that, still am a bit, though it's gradually getting better.

What I find particularly interesting about the style here is the breaking of the lines. Actually you could put the whole poem into one sentence, but it would make the reading experience very different. For example, the first time I looked at this poem I read you're afraid to let anyone stoke the fire in your chest for fear you will burn. Only on seconed thought I realised that there's still the them alive added. So, that's why I really like the style you wrote the poem in: depending on how you read it you find different meanings, and that makes this poem enjoyable to read again and again.
Also, I really like you added author's comment. It gives the whole rather gloomy atmosphere of the poem a wonderful uplift.
Thank you for such wonderful words.
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Sillyforpatatoes Featured By Owner May 29, 2014
Perfect
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Angel-Brat36 Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
I adore this one too!
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XxAlleyxCatxX Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014
i love this one so much. <3 
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
How well I can relate. How painfully well. 
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
:heart: Great poem!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
thank you! :thanks:
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AngelicEuphoria Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student General Artist
No, I disagree! 
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w-o-a-nderer Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Wow, I really like this. Especially since I misread stoke to be stroke, but I suppose that's what I wanted to read. It's interesting to see all the commenting and critique - I guess it goes to show how we all interpret it the way it suits us to relate to ourselves, even if we do it subconsciously. I like how these few lines have so much potential contained within them for us each to write our own stories between them of what's in our own hearts and heads.
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