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you were life's new
work of art;
small easel bones
and a blank
canvas of skin

but he ruined  
you over time,
added the brush
of a scar
or two
(there's no
going
over those)
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What-so-ever Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014
I know I am a bit late to comment on this, but I remember seeing it on the front page about a month ago and it just just me thinking. I bookmarked it and I've been looking at it a time and again, when I was feeling a bit down.

You see, I have tons of scars all over. When I was little, I crawled up a bookcase, stupid as toddlers are, and the thing tipped over on top of me; got my first scars then. When I grew to a child, I was really clumsy, so I always fell down. That gave me tons of scars on my hands and knees. In my tweens, I grew really fast; so fast my skin could not keep up and I get stretch marks. In my teens, I crashed on my scooter and my face said hello to the pavement.
And you know what? When I look in the mirror, it's not any of those scars I see. It is the ones on my sides; the stretch marks there, because they're my proof that my beautiful daughter gave me scars, so scars can never be a bad thing.
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TheHandsomeRockLee Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
Now THIS is a poem.
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Morticia-Lynne Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student Writer
There are a million and one ways this can be interpreted, and you have summarized them all into ten sentences.
You have so much talent, it's just breath taking sometimes.
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WateryGrave Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Student General Artist
I really like the simplicity of this.
It has quiet meaning, and it's refreshing to read that.
=)
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i could never understand how people can see beauty in scars. in others of course, just not mine
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014
why not yours?
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:iconphan5everx2:
Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Others scars usually show they were stronger than whatever tried to hurt them, but if I was strong I would have scars in the first place
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014
no. in hurting yourself, you are fighting yourself.
if you think scars show that people were stronger than what tried to hurt them, why can't that apply to the self inflicted ones? why not all scars?
what makes one scar different from the other, really? they are all wounds that have healed, however people want to look at it.
you are much stronger than you think, and you are certainly stronger than the part of you you are fighting.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you are so poetic even when talking about something that is not at all simple... i guess every scar has a story but when it has healed all scars just show the same thing, i'm still here. thank you.
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cooper6044 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
I'm ok with the scars, they make me different from the other canvases.
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OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
But are scars really ruined? They can add to the tapestry. paint over, paint around, make them a part of the piece, and above all else own them. They do not own you.
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FruitnCreme Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
i approve.. ;_;
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OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks.
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YoungAddict Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
ruined? nah... just added a bit more depth. 
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:icongibrick:
gibrick Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You okay?
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
i'm good. you good?
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:icongibrick:
gibrick Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yep I'd say I'm fine, good day to you madame.
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gibrick Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Actually, I was asking because sometimes your head might get from hitting against the wall.
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panda0v0 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the way it is phrased 
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Trevormarriott Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
Its a wonderful poem.Points 
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MelanieCaracas1617 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I love poems. Yours is one of them.
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WizzyGameMaster Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i'm sure others have said this a thousand times, but it will never be enough to truly express how beautiful it really is
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lostatthestart1413 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student Writer
Beautiful job you wrote something that everybody can relate to it evokes empathy and I think the way u spaced it was brilliant be proud of your work it fabulous.
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shep4life Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well done
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SquirrelMarination Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes.
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SNZMano Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
beautiful
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PolkaDottedCoffeeMug Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student General Artist
A beautiful poem
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shadow-lozano Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
Wow, beautiful..
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dessadawnherman Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
painful beauty and truth here. stark honesty. very nice
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alicia-herzen-67 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I really like this
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And you, my friend, paint vivid images with your words :)
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:iconkhronicle:
KhRoNicLe Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
Very well spoken 👍👍👍
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PatheticPoltergeist Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student General Artist
the way you work with words is so gorgeous, i lose my own :heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
aaw thank you :blush:
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PatheticPoltergeist Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student General Artist
it's not a problem :iconloveloveplz:
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LokiWolf Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
This is moving, touching and indeed very thought provoking.
Bravo.
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VividDreams13 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist
Love it :-)
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maironmatos Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
Cool!
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wolfchild1214 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student
so true, love it!! :D
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PenguinLongitudes Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
gorgeous!
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Saihai Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
A scar is probably not necessarily going to ruin a painting, and definitely not a person. 
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JudasEiserscott Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think he means emotional scars..?
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:iconsaihai:
Saihai Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
So do I~ 
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sure she was speaking metaphorically as well.
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wxnderlust Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful
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VictorHugo Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Professional Digital Artist

a book well read and loved is worn out and yellow.


a book dispised is brand white new and untouched.

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FruitnCreme Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student Digital Artist
beautiful... 
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:iconvictorhugo:
VictorHugo Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
hehe thanks, glad you like it!
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MorphoAdonis Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Ugh. I hate the idea of anything "ruining" people. It's a disgusting and often misogynistic outdated idea.
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cheetah-spotts Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student General Artist
First of all, oaklungs never stated whether the individual 'ruined' was female or male. Honestly, scars are gender neutral. c:

But I really do have to agree with you.  I don't believe that anyone is ever 'ruined'.  The word ruin implies irreversible damage.  With the proper strength, determination, and assistance, a person can recover, learn to deal with the fears.  They can do something with their lives.  

Perhaps a better word might have been 'broke'.  Something broken can be glued back together. c: 
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