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i shudder
when you speak;
your words are
cold when they
touch me
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xXHawkkie13Xx Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And yet when you aren't talking to me,
I want you to.
I always have loved the cold.
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bootsnchaps Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
You shudder
when I speak;
Because
you want me to touch you
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Inevitably-dead Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love your writing. It is so powerful <3
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AnimeBVBFreak Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Reading your poems really makes me want to pick your brain.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014
what about?
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AnimeBVBFreak Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Just, your life story in general. Your poems make me curious about you.
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kirbyfight1 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
I really like it! Stronger emotional poems are able to convey a big message with only a few lines,
and this poem really touched me.
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:iconanila73:
anila73 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
(you can heat them up and they'll stick to me warm, but they'll feel cold later)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
i swear to god your comments make my poems 120% better.
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LmonLimeCat Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
It's always the sarcasm that gets me
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
sarcasm? where?
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LmonLimeCat Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Not your poem :) I mean when people are sarcastic towards me it comes off as cold and pissed lol
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MysticMcR Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
This actually made me feel cold. Beautiful. 
I have such a clear picture in my head for this poem.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
thank you so much :hug:
(my words are also cold sometimes, i'm sorry they made you so)
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MysticMcR Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Is it okay for me to do a kind of illustration for this poem?
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
of course!
if you do, let me know, i'd love to see it! :heart:
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MysticMcR Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
I shall, thank you :)
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appa-appa-away Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I know a few people I could apply this to. 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
oh :(
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:iconghost-of-a-gone-bird:
like ice,gave me the shiversHeart 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
:hug:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
sad
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:iconkeitone:
keitone Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow... you are just way too awesome!! 5 stanzas and thats all you take to describe a feeling :) 
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
Five stanza?
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:iconkeitone:
keitone Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
haha yep :) I hope thats right.. I'm not too well versed with poetry terms :p 
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Jabbia Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Five lines, dear, there's only one stanza. :D
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:iconkeitone:
keitone Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oh I see haha :) thank you Hug 
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful! Great job, once again ^^
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
thank you so much :hug:
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:iconthat1personyouforgot:
That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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