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he stood on the shore,
and told the sea he loved her;
the jealous wind tore his
voice in two
and she went out again, not knowing
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tierlily197 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow... this is amazing. 
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InvisibleSpider28 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014
I love this. It's very beautiful, and realistic. :) 
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innoctemn Featured By Owner May 17, 2014
oh!!  this poem is so perfect! its so simple but a true love story if ive ever seen one:']
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bootsnchaps Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
She went out again, full well knowing

he stood on the shore,
and told the sea that he loved her;
the unloyal rip tide pulled it away
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Nestharon Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014   Writer
I like two things in this poem. Firstly "... told the sea he loved her;" and "... jealous wind tore his voice ..." These parts are so full of emotions and metaphors. I like them very much.
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RoriWolf Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014
I wrote a little thing based on this if you want to read it! roriwolf.deviantart.com/art/In…
Hope you like it! Xxxx
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TotallyUncreativeMe Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Reading the description straight afterwards, it just fits perfectly. I'm in awe :')
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iMerge Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
I really love this piece, it's flawless in it's simplicity. Really great. :)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
thank you so much :tighthug:
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BlissBaby13 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Student General Artist
Oh man, I really like this. Lovely. <3
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MixedSunlight Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
........

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RiseandbeStronger Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Heartbreaking. Simple, but powerful. In four lines, you told an entire story. And it really packs a punch.
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Prtybaby Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Very unique original lines.
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:iconnorimori:
NoriMori Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Oooh the bit added in the description makes it even better!
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:iconwdnest:
wdnest Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Professional Writer
Wonderful
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ordinary-monster Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
Striking piece of work with brilliant metaphors.
As for the interpretation, sounds to me the sea has not been the only one to hear he loves her.
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I like how you make small things so epic. When I first saw your work on the front page, I asked myself, "How does something like this always make the front page?" But now I see why. It's so relatable to everyone, the fact that you use personification makes the feeling so much stronger. Your writing can be interpreted in so many ways, so good job, I like this! 
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TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
This place you speak of, I know it, I've been there... heh... still am actually. 
EPIC SIMPLICITY, SIMPLY PERFECT...
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JmetRopolis Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
Lovely.
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AlTeRuNmEi Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
Dayum poor shore man
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:iconriy-mite:
Riy-mite Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014   Artist
WHOA, that's deeper than the ocean and more vast than the forest's of green! LOL 

Love this! 
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Oldsoul-Mira Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student General Artist
how can 20 words hold so much emotion? well done :)
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Elocinyoj Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
I think "and she went out again, not knowing" should be included. It really takes it a step further and makes it that much more moving!
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summersrain28 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I love it! And I completely agree Elocinyoj! :)
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Huskylover133 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
interesting
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leaderwolf5808 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Snap Snap I love this one.
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A-Lucky-Mutt Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
I am just, like, imagining a crab being the one who tells the sea he loves her

And another crab is just all like "who do you think you are, haru from 50% off?!?"
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dezi007 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*snaps fingers continuously!!* :)
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xXTheBlackSheepXx Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I literally got a chill reading this O_O
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FinnishVampire Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
this is so short and simple yet so heart breaking.
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Rianetta Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014   General Artist
I can't help but giggle at how legit this is for Haru of Free!

But at the sametime, i love your short lines. They give me the cutest images to draw~ 
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TheBritWriter Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
I shame myself in saying this, but what's the meaning behind this poem? The imagery is striking but am not fully grasping the meaning of the poem.
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Oldsoul-Mira Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student General Artist
that's the point - I think you're supposed to interpret it however you want to without any certain meaning. I see it as a metaphor for life.
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AlexanderSpencer Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Professional General Artist
I pictured a man on a cliff screaming to the sea "I love you!". And the wind being jealous tore his voice in two - I took that as in his voice echoed, so it became two.
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XxRockFiendxX Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Heartbreakingly beautiful <3
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suns3ta Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're really inspiring.Nod  
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Sylpheah Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow - this gives me goosebumps! :)
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horsey14 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
beautiful!
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StimulatingImagery Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This describes exactly what happened to me recently...
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
i'm so sorry about that :cling:
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StimulatingImagery Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, it's alright tho. It was meant to be.
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ReubenDeFlash Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student Writer
A heartbreaking image.
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SyaraSirene Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Absolutely beautiful
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WolfiaThunderas1841 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful. :meow:
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Vallentiny Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That's really beautiful. Ahh *__*
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah I love the image <3 
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dotzilla Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautiful.
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appa-appa-away Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This broke my heart to read. Beautiful :heart: 
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MaryItIs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Just wow!
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