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i scrub love
off your knuckles
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:iconadagiobunny:
Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Student Writer
cleansing unwanted emotions. each word packs a punch... 
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Shadow-Star42 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Even though there are few words, it makes you think.
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ReyRay Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, it's crazy how only six words could hit so hard.
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IlluminatedHeart Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I hate it how people are simple to judge that they're just "two sentences" and that this didn't deserve a front page
While other people can use their imagination for once and put more meaning in this
I'd say, good job on this, it really got me thinking
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Whoa.
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marvelousmavis Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
and here i thought it's about a masochist, that's why i liked it. . .hehe!
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Nico-Di-Angelo-fan Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The best thing about works like these is because you can think anything of them! I admit, even I thought it was about masochism!
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014   Writer
Potent within its simplicity.
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thebookofnights Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Professional Writer
Wow. <3
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imunchoncereal Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
asdfghjkl;'
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Ikuzram021 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
This actually is well written poetry :) good job!
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pinkypiejr12 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
uh...explanation please?
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crshh Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
I think Oaklungs is refering to the love/hate tattoos that people get on their knuckles, making it a statement about violence. I'm sure what that statement is though.
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pinkypiejr12 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
oh
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Wayleen Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
Or I was thinking maybe a girl would say that about her boyfriend beating her, scrubbing the blood off the knuckles. 
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WizardHowl10001 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
Same^^^
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IndigoDragon456 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Student General Artist
or~ maybe Oaklungs had no story behind this and left us to wonder. as with all well written deep poetry x3
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Sorantheman Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
...not sure if deep or not...
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ASlovesLisa Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student General Artist
The first time I didn't understand it, I speak Spanish, there are some words I still don't know or expressions, that explains everything, but If I don't understand it, that doesn't means it's not a poem or my little sister can write something similar.
I used to write a lot of poetry the last year, and I wrote a piece of me in every poem.
It's like a nice way to talk loud, writing something smart.
In six words you said something important, people don't know exactly but they're trying to understand.
That's important.
Not everyone can do this.

If you think this is stupid, just don't say that, If you talk bad about other person's work, your words will say bad things about you.
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IndigoDragon456 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Student General Artist
good point =3
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Kyvex-Ky-Windcloud Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
O i love these short poems
especially when they're done right 

i can think of two possible plots that this thing is following 
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veddabredda Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I feel like everyone in these comments trying to define exactly what this poem is about is totally missing the point. There's intent of the author, and then there's what the poem means to YOU, and those can be radically different things. The fact that people can see radically different interpretations from this is a good thing and makes it MORE of a poem, if anything. Not really understanding the demand that everything be 100% obvious. If it were, what would be the point?
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StrawberryGiggles Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer
Lovely poem 

BUT

I thought it said "I scrub love off your knickers"
And was worried.

:blush: sorry, crude..
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
haha, no worries
i can see how that mistake might be made :P
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
now i can't stop reading it like that :giggle:
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StrawberryGiggles Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer
I'm still reading it like that too :lol:
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Narresiah Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm actually pretty schocked about all the comments... This is better than many things I've read and yes, it's only six words, but it HAS a meaning. It means a lot, but some people just don't WANT to get it, because 6 words might be better than their work, maybe? I don't really know, I just don't understand how someone could NOT see what's going on in these two lines.

Also - poetry is a lot about subjectivity. A poem can have one meaning to me and a completely different meaning to somebody else - it all depends on our LIFESTYLE and our EXPERIENCES. I think that if this poem means absolutely nothing to you, you can consider yourself lucky, OR really ignorant (because even though I'm a positive person and I read something dark I can still understand and it fills me with feelings - that's how poetry works, basically).

Anyway, I think this is incredible. Sometimes the most brilliant pieces are close to "nothing" :) 
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cheylouwho Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I couldn't agree more! 
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oniberi Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the gift you have with words.
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Whetsit-Tuya Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Filmographer
Thats nuttin, watch me get front page on one sentence! :iconsobossplz:
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DireWolfwere Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Is this about domestic abuse or defending someone's honor???

At first I thought it was abuse because you tend to write darker poetry and poetry in general seems to be dark, but I'm a positive person on occasion so I thought perhaps it was about someone getting into a fight to defend their lover's honor and then the lover cleans them up after.

Or the scrubbing love off of the knuckle could of course mean the abused lover is sitting there trying to see love where there is violence. lol. poetry with multiple meanings that are total opposites :I
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TheIcyGlaceon Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer

There's no insight at all in this.

 

It's just 2 meaningless sentences put together.

 

How is this, in any way, a poem?

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oniberi Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're so closed minded it hurts.

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TheIcyGlaceon Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer
You're so open minded it hurts.

I wonder…if I just sat down and wrote "I love the smell of pure bullshit in the mornings", submitted it as poetry, and had people look at it, what sort of silly answers I'd get and how many fools I'd have trying to "interpret" something so meaningless.

This guy sure must have a fun time doing just that. It looks like a lot of fun :)
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oniberi Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's not meaningless.
This poem has meaning to the writer.
And whether you choose to accept that is your choice.
However, that does not make it okay to slate it, when it clearly has meaning to the poet.
How would you feel if someone called your works meaningless?
It would hurt wouldn't it?
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ASlovesLisa Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student General Artist
I actually need an "I like" button in comments (:
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oniberi Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aha, I agree >w<
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DireWolfwere Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Obviously, a person punched some jerk in the face to defend his/her lover (or close friend I suppose) and the lover is cleaning them up.
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TheIcyGlaceon Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer

....?

 

It doesn't say that at all. All it says are "knuckkles" and "love".

 

What a wild assumption

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DireWolfwere Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Reading poetry is an art. You need to infer a lot (that's kinda the point of certain (most) forms of poetry). The poem could also be interpreted to be about domestic abuse (as it seems most of the other readers have), but I personally prefer to look at it in a positive light.

Just for the ease of explaining this, lets assume the narrator is a woman and the "you" is a man. The woman is scrubbing love off of his knuckles - from this we can assume that they are probably lovers. Now why would a man have love on his knuckles? Why would they need to be scrubbed (cleaned)? An act of love that could get you an injured/dirty hand (from blood) could be punching someone in the face for insulting yo' gurl. Thus the wife/girlfriend cleans up her man after whatever fight may have ensued.

If you still can't figure it out, I'm sorry, poetry probably isn't your thing then. lol.
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TheIcyGlaceon Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer

Umm, it's funny you accuse ME of knowing nothing about poetry, someone who is an actual poet, while you're here trying to find depth (and failing at your attempts to) in this poem a kindergartner could honestly write.

What makes it worse is that it doesn't even have proper punctuation and grammar.

 

My little sister could have written this, and have written more meaning into the poem too.

 

It is you that does not know anything about poetry.

 

Have fun trying to find mean in childish quips and limmericks, subjects that obviously fit your tastes more.

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Macabreapple Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
Excuse you? Who judges whether you're an 'actual poet'?? Do you do this for a living? Is it your career? Who are you to say whether your style of poetry is the only one acceptable as 'actual poetry'?
Also, I do believe they managed to find depth. I think their interpretation was very interesting, and gives new light on what I originally thought.
Okay, you know what, kindergarteners write things about stuff they know. Things like their favourite colour, or maybe an activity they enjoy. Scrubbing love off someone's knuckles (however you may interpret it) is certainly not something someone who has the resources to go to kindergarten would be familiar with.

Also, if you would look to what category this amazing piece is under? That's right. It says 'Free Verse'. This means that spelling, punctuation, grammar, doesn't matter if you don't need it to. Semi-colons are often used, and the sentences are broken in funny places.
I, personally, find this beautiful. If you dislike it, go back to your simple poetry that is easy to read and understand.

EXCUSE YOU AGAIN! Did you write the first poem? Were you the one to say: THIS. This lovely creation... is a poem.
Were you around for the hundreds of years it took to explore the use of words? Have you ever risen to the top, and had your name etched into the very foundations of history like Shakespeare, or Swinburne, or Tennyson?? Have you ever defined an aspect of human nature so intricately with only the use of six words? I think not.
Then who are you to say what 'proper poetry' is?

Also, a quip is a witty remark, and usually those using witty remarks are clever, and should be complimented. If you're so specific and meticulous about using correct grammar, spelling, and words, then use the correct ones yourself.
Besides that, you spelt 'limerick' wrong. And this poem is not a limerick.
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PhobiaPhobe Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Digital Artist
hey mann this person was just trying to help you out,

also have you ever heard of e e cummings? He's known for not using punctuation in his poetry and he's pretty famous. Poetry doesn't need proper punctuation and grammar.
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TheIcyGlaceon Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer
Oh, well then why don't we invite some kindergartners over and try to get them to write poetry to have people praise over?

If it doesn't have proper puncutation, it's not proper english.
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Kyvex-Ky-Windcloud Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Proper English does not actually exist
all it was and all it is...is a mixture of leftover and slang from older and purer languages 
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PhobiaPhobe Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Digital Artist
haha okay maybe it isn't proper english but it's still poetry
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DireWolfwere Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Poetry doesn't need to have proper punctuation or grammar, the use of imporoper grammar can actually improve poetry quite a bit because it can give the poem a different feel or mood or change the beat. Why are you so quick to dismiss something just because you can't see meaning in it where others can? I wasn't trying to offend you. Yo' calm your tits. I enjoyed reading this poem (as I enjoy most of this poet's work) and I was trying to share that with you. Yes, some forms of poetry are quite a bit more direct, but there are still deeper meanings that are more difficult to find within them.

I'm sorry if my replies came off as rude or sarcastic, I mean the things (that could be seen as rude) I say in jest or light and friendly humor. I wasn't trying to initiate a pissing contest. lol.
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UselessItalian Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Sometimes two sentences can mean more than you think. Especially to the person who wrote it. 
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TheIcyGlaceon Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer

But, there's no MEANING behind it.

It just sounds like nonsense honestly

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