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you broke
a heart,
convinced
that there was
something good
inside
weren't you a fool
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:iconfadedworlds:
fadedworlds Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2014  Student Writer
I just... my God. Sometimes I think you might be the goddess of poetry. You are simply amazing. <3
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:iconadagiobunny:
Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Student Writer
love as a geode without crystal insides... gorgeously hurt, with a hint of chiding. :heart:
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:iconyumeih:
Yumeih Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:'(
And why they are breaking hearts, if they know that there's something good inside ?
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
there could be good, there could be bad, there could be nothing at all.
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:iconsketcherzz:
Sketcherzz Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
this fits one of my 'friends' perfectly....
this is amazingly written, and is an exact representation of how i feel
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:iconjohnashleigh:
JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014   Writer
Wow...
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:iconfableweaver55:
fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love the darkness in your work. Never stop writing.
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:iconshinseinasenshi:
Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Do we ever plan or are decieved into believing that we mean to. Some of us don't.
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:iconpeaceinnadisworld:
peaceinnadisworld Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Artist
have done that and have been done that to. 

beautiful x 
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:iconsherbetblooms:
sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
punchy :heart: loved this.
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:iconsrinath-ste-v:
srinath-ste-v Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's a perspective that everyone misses thank you for pointing it out.....................


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:iconyosheethekiller:
YosheeTheKiller Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
       Keeps on trying
    To reconstruct
Broken hearts
From tiny pieces
Into some good
Shape




Feels almost as stupid.  
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:iconkunhai-dai:
Kunhai-Dai Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Student Photographer
wonderful
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:iconsilvernium:
silvernium Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Break a heart, and we end up with sharp pieces that cut. The question is, who shattered it?
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:iconhellionscythe:
HellionScythe Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Almost didn't fave this because the words hurt....but I had too because it is true...
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:iconzeitnehmer:
Zeitnehmer Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Thats pretty amzing ^_^
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:iconricardo-orozco:
Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
so inpiring
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:iconmaryitis:
MaryItIs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
love it
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:iconjellyka-chan:
jellyka-chan Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Is that why they brake us.... Hm, there is no good in us. How can there be?
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:iconsuperpander:
SuperPander Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
What's it supposed to mean exactly? That there was nothing good inside that person simply put? Or that it was just stupid to think the person actually loved you?
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:iconsurrealnacre:
SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student General Artist
When we have a hammer, we swing. But sometimes we swing it to much.
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:iconiceangel1234:
IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:O Awesome
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:iconthecheshercat:
TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I feel like every comment I leave will just keep repeating this: yours is the most marvelous minimalist poetry I've ever seen.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
i feel like every comment i will reply to you will just be: thank you so so much :tighthug::heart:
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:iconthecheshercat:
TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbigheartplz:
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KathlynNicole Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
I love how short and clipped this is, and punchy.  It's beautifully done.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
thank you very much!
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appa-appa-away Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Foolish indeed. I know too many people who have done that. All they do is unleash demons. 
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appa-appa-away Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Great poem, by the way :) 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
thank you!
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:icon17sevens:
17Sevens Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
No prize inside, so take the hint
And stripe both wrists, like peppermints.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
this is rather lovely.
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:icongimgams:
gimgams Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014   Traditional Artist
It's so simple, but so perfect. How are you doing that.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
aw ha, thank you :blushes:
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:iconlmonlimecat:
LmonLimeCat Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
i was disappointed when i saw the insides
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
most are.
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:iconlilysplash:
Lilysplash Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Amazing. Just amazing. So short yet so poignant; utterly beautiful.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
thank you so much :tighthug:
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:iconlilysplash:
Lilysplash Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
No problem. c; Truly a wonderful work.
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chinoise56 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Succinct, yet powerfully emotional.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
:thanks:
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:iconchinoise56:
chinoise56 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:-)
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mnglXmplr Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014   General Artist
i had to shed a tear after reading this:nuu:...great.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
:tighthug:
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:iconmnglxmplr:
mnglXmplr Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014   General Artist
:cuddle:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
tighthug:
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DireWolfwere Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great; I love how you portray so much with so few words: People get into relationships because they believe that their partner is good and might be the one, but when they split up they break each other's hearts, and then each person likes to blame theirself for the breakup, thinking "no one could love me, I'm awful" of course there was nothing good inside. That's what I get out of your poem anyway C:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
that's a pretty good explanation of it! :heart:
i love hearing your interpretations.
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:icondirewolfwere:
DireWolfwere Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, haha, I like trying to interpret poetry C:
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:icongolden-leaves:
Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I can already tell that I'm going to love you as a poet. You see things different than anyone else.
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