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pour love all
over, then strike
a match;

the fire will
burn itself out,
but the ruins
will smoulder
for quite some fucking time
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Sillyforpatatoes Featured By Owner May 29, 2014
I extremely love all your works this one is awesome
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014   Writer
This is very imaginative and accomplished. Well done. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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RealizingRealitee Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ouch
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halierae Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I admire your work.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
thank you very much!
i'm glad you like my poems :hug:
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rentintent Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nice one.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
thank you :)
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
oh man. this is powerful.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
:thanks:
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is gorgeous and you're brilliant :)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
ooh no i'm not, i'm far from it!
(but thank you so much, you are lovely) :tighthug:
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Sedron-Cevaak Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I have no words to describe the emotions I felt stir in me when I read this. This is extremely relevant to the point I'm at in life right now.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
i am incredibly sorry about that :cling::heart:
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xEverlastingLiGHT Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Short yet it explains so much :)
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RURALPARADIS Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Great poetry! Short and sweet! I love it!
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Chive-Turkey Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Ha! As does my shoulder!
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danimalGAME Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
its beautiful
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BlackSheep6 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the idea of using love as fire-accelerator. It does have similar effect sometimes... actually, more often than just sometimes. 
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yourjackskellington Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Writer
this is gorgeous. 
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RubiCub3 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
This, my friend, is the most beautiful thing I have read in a very long time. It deserves an 'Accurate' stamp! 
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ares12 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Writer
I don't get it.
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res8zenith Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
nice
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Channini Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, perfect. I totally get what you mean by this, as long as what you mean is the lasting bitterness from a short "flame"
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EmeraldEyes14 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think this might be the best explanation of the "life-cycle" of love I have ever seen, as well as a beautiful piece of poetry.
Powerful
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Faded-Rainbows Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
while you might not have been going for a specific pattern, i find switching the places of "strike a match" and "pour love all over" would better suit the poem.
just my preference, feel free to ignore me...
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mystifytheworld Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Writer

Crush the carbon in your fists

And let the ash make way to diamonds.

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appa-appa-away Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This. Just perfect. 
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hadasaugh Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Professional General Artist
what the fuck the fuck this is awesome!
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
exactly
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remeron-nap Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
what else is there though, really...
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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love is but gasoline in a jar in our chests. :thumbsup:
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RubiCub3 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
This comment gets the "Most Beautiful" award.
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SurrealNacre Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks ^^
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