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i dug up the
past again, those
memories vicious
and snarling

i set them loose
inside the house
and now we have
to leave
6th time lucky
(this makes me laugh too)
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:icondarksack100:
darksack100 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
This made me laugh


Then I regreted it because that probably makes me a bad person.
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:iconroshiray:
Roshiray Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
whoah! this is powefull stuffI think I've fainted. 
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NuminousNocturne Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is a brutal metaphor. An excellent poem but a brutal metaphor.
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:iconjohnashleigh:
JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014   Writer
This is very potent.
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:iconamenarae:
Amenarae Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is A nice piece, and it reminded me of one I wrote some time ago. Would you read it? It's not long.
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:iconrentintent:
rentintent Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I wish we could lock them up inside the house, then leave the house forever...
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:iconkaleidoscopic365:
Kaleidoscopic365 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Once Upon a Time, there was a short story called 'Casa Tomada', about an unseen force that took over a house...do you think memories are what a house- or a person- contains?
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Amenarae Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
If I could favorite this comment, I would.
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:iconkaleidoscopic365:
Kaleidoscopic365 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
Haha, why? :D
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:iconamenarae:
Amenarae Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Because it is fabulous~
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love your poetry, mein lieber, because you are proving that it is not necessary to have long poems filled with detail and distracting adjectives. The true beauty is in simplicity.
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fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Why, this is just beautiful.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
aw thank you :blushes:
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:iconfableweaver55:
fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And love the imagery in this :)
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Wordheld Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
I like the ending!But my English is too poor to say something about it.
Well,sometimes I just need the courage to loose and forget resentment and start over.So now I'm about to leave.
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starrysky963 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist
Wow. The ending is so simple, and incredibly poignant. Imagery in the first stanza is phenominal. :heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
thank you so much :thanks::rose:
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:icon1loveee:
1loveee Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
im trying to understand poetry lol
but i like this one, i relate
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tuffhoss Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You have such fantastic poetry. :rose:
I brought out my memories from their cages before, and tried to train them not to bite; it didn't work.
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JocastaTheWeird Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. This one really speaks to me. 
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Eevee1999 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Student Writer
Gosh, you're so amazing, I can't even be jealous :love: I love how everything you write changes something simple into a complex thought and it just,,, words can't describe it :heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
words can't describe the feeling i got when i read this :heart:
thank you so so much for this lovely comment, really.
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Eevee1999 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student Writer
You truly deserve the praise! :love: You are an extremely talented person, and I thank you for being so amazing! :tighthug:
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RoadToWhatever Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Brilliant!
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
:thanks:
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keitone Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Once again another masterpiece!! great imagery and I just love how you convey your message in this! Pure beauty! 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
thank you so much :blushes:
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aoi9875 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol 
this one literally made me laugh because of how clever it is.
Love how you describe feelings and memories as things that are animate and real. 

Another Nice write. 




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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
thank you very much! :thanks:
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ordinary-monster Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014
I interpret this like 'We had an argument', but beats me (...as usual...) how did you manage to come up with such poetic way to suggest what and why happened. Persistence is a virtue when used to construct and not destroy. :)

The text reminds me of the saying 'Let the sleeping dogs lie' and how sometimes the temptation not to do that becomes too great to resist. Often it is for the purpose of trying to hurt someone where it'd hurt most and as result there may be no going back to what there used to be.
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ooooh. I have ideas now. This is amazing, as always
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
glad it could help! haha.
thank you though :blushes:
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goodiesbasket Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Professional Writer
you have the most fantastic poetry
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
oh thank you :blushes:
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:iconanila73:
anila73 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
might need to get an exorcist before you go xD
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
naah, i'll leave that to the next occupants :giggle:
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:iconanila73:
anila73 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
well that's not very nice, haven't you watched any horror movies? xD
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
too many, i know how they go xP
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imadori-kyosuke Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
nice!:) (Smile) 
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LucidLumi Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"Honey, we have to go. Grab the kids."

I apologize for nothing (also, this is lovely, pardon the joke).
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
i laughed. a lot :giggle:
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:iconlucidlumi:
LucidLumi Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
=P (Razz)  Hee.
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:iconmalkfox:
MalkFox Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student General Artist
Heh.. they might just follow ;A;
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
then i can only hope to lose them somewhere along the way.
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
When I set "them" lose. I got kicked out, the kids drove her to wits end, then I was invited back. Lol
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
that does sound vicious.
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lol
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ProudTortoise Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
This is funny.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
i know :giggle:
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melancholxyz Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Your poetry speaks a lot to me.
Would I be allowed to quote them in various places. 
I would, of course, credit you and link back to your original piece.

I would understand if not!
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