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sometimes
the voice
in my head
decides to
curl up in
my throat
instead

and sometimes
the beat of
your heart
decides to
make itself
known through
your fists
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:iconwiztch:
Wiztch Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014   Artisan Crafter
This defined me right now.
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:iconretransmission:
retransmission Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014   Traditional Artist
Beautiful poetry!
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:iconcyanmask:
CyanMask Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
well... this is not the right page to post this comment.
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:iconwolfgang627:
Wolfgang627 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student General Artist
you can say that again
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:iconcyanmask:
CyanMask Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
sure complaining is really just informing others of what you thing is wrong, but sometimes what you think is wrong is really not that bad. it's okay to insult people. it's not polite but it is normal so... meh. slapping anyone's butt will earn you a punch, slap to the face or any other form of, let's call it Quick Term Prosecution. the way individuals see you is not important. fuck individuals, they are sluts anyway. the way society sees you is something else and sometimes should be changed, buuuut if something is accepted by society, everyone will think it's fine and they wont change it anyway. at least not just overnight.

but even if most people dislike you, and even if you dont want anyone to like you, somehow someone will.
so i guess i'm sorry. i'm sorry you dont always like what people think, i'm sorry you feel like complaining about it and most of all, i'm sorry for rain.
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Wolfgang627 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student General Artist
you are a goddess that has caused emotion to be felt by a man who burned his own soul. thank you.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
i have a certain love for this comment, and
i think it will stick with me for a long time, if not
forever
:heart:
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:iconwolfgang627:
Wolfgang627 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student General Artist
thank you. your poetry has really helped me and has inspired me. I would be honored if you took a look at some of my own poetry and left your opinion on them :)  
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is really strong. It can be hard to understand how someone feels when they choose the most destructive ways to show it.
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blubbityblub Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Do you know how important you are? Do you know that with 29 words you inspire waves of emotion that most novels struggle to elicit a whisper of. Do you know that you make people smile, and cry, and you lift them up and you tell them "I understand" with every piece you put out? i want you to be okay. No, not okay, you don't deserve 'okay'. You deserve 'happy, 'content', 'safe', 'loved'. Do you know that the most important, the most wonderful people create beautiful things, and you've created a beautiful thing right here. You are more than your flaws, more than your demons, more than your bad days, more than your wonderful, powerful poems.

Please stay strong. Keep your head up.
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TheIrishChild Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I love this.
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:iconlara00:
Lara00 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nine of ten voices in my head thinlk this is a great poem.
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IndigoDragon456 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Student General Artist
so one voice is a hater huh... whats his name? x3
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:iconlara00:
Lara00 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh he's not a hater,but he...well,he likes Justin Bieber.We don't talk about him.That's why family dinners are rather awkward.
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IndigoDragon456 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student General Artist
xD
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LoveStruckIdiot Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional General Artist
So true ~^~
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Sorosoro Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
When your fists do the talking you usually do it for good reasons.
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aoi9875 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's crazy....


Especially the first half of this.. Yea Really grabs attention fast. 
Also, it's very visual, this one, I think that's what I like about it alot.
The imagery sorta screams and rushes in your head, as quick as you read the words. 
I love it. 
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
you say so much with so few words. amazing,
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:iconjohnashleigh:
JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014   Writer
I get the feeling of domestic trouble here. It definitely has an angst. Powerfully expressed. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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Sssorry Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
Powerful punch indeed.
White light,
Sorry
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DarkShadeStar Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student Writer
I don't even know what to say, I love this poem so much. (Then again, I love all your poems.)
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anila73 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
sometimes your words take the globe of my world and give it a spin.



your last poem was on this subject as well, please tell me you're okay
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
oh i'm okay.
always.
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:iconanila73:
anila73 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
good.
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:iconaia42:
AIA42 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Love how this shows rather than tells the emotion. Amazing.
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VanePyroRocker Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Student General Artist
WOW! Wow! 
Amazing....simple incredible and sublime.
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danimalGAME Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i imagined the creepypasta the origins of laughing jack when Issacs dad beats his mom to death
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WilliamDallwitz Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Student General Artist
sometimes...

amazing. :)
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:iconchive-turkey:
Chive-Turkey Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
I imagined an enraged gorilla.
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:iconlibertades:
Libertades Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You capture it all in words. I see the message.... quite rough!
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:iconbubblegumw:
BubblegumW Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Unfortunately, it is true for all of us.
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HavickTheLion Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beutifull
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow
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djinn98 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
Once again your work amazes Me. Capturing all the feelings and emotions in only 14 lines. Wonderful job!
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HunterBeingHunted Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So much emotion within so few words. This had a great impact on me, great work! I love it!
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goodiesbasket Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional Writer
BEAUTIFUL
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KARENREHN Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
This poem is amazing. Within its simplicity is a profoundly complex message. It resonated deeply within me! Thank you
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:iconlalamoe:
LaLaMoe Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
 That last little section, that part hit me hard. So simple yet truth in each word. Lots of impact. love this
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:iconhalierae:
halierae Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Gosh... You have no idea how much I love this.
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
DAMN.

such a subtle biting summation of the false way love and abuse conflate themselves. heartbeat through the first. damn.
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The-Dormant-Sprite Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student Writer
A lump in your throat is a common manifestation of anxiety.
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:iconindigodragon456:
IndigoDragon456 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student General Artist
this is sooo deep and beautiful
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ZeldaVoorhees Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Artist

I love how fluid and beautiful this sounds.

Right now, the voice in my head is making itself known through the smile on my face. 

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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I love and am amazed at how you can take something so complex and put it so simply and beautifully.
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TheButtOverLord Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Never would've thought of it this way.
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:iconpokepower888:
Pokepower888 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
An amazing way of thinking of things. Very well done ^^ Short but bittersweet.
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myocsareawesome Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
your poetry is so amazing
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
So... much...   imagery.
Well done...   hope you are ok. :(
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imadori-kyosuke Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautiful!:) (Smile) 
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