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i saw mars
hit venus,
sent her
spinning like
a marble;

a fire
rose within
her soul,
i saw a
red sea
flow
i wanna keep the planets in a velvet drawstring pouch
i wanna wear them on a string around my neck and round my
wrist~
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Erednay Featured By Owner May 17, 2014
Intriguing poem, I like the dynamic imagery that it has.
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MsCrayCray Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I am going to write all of this and the description on my walls, is that okay?
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014
i wouldn't want you to ruin your walls! :ohnoes:
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MsCrayCray Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I've already drawn a lot on my walls so it wouldn't matter
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I've always liked the idea of playing marbles with the planets
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014   Writer
A very intriguing write....
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tuffhoss Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So lovely~ :heart:
I want to hang the planets from my bedroom ceiling and let them light my walls at night.
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LexCorp213 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
lovely
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Chive-Turkey Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014
She sounds pretty upset.
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IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow so short but so much going on! Awesome (:
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Aeromars Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Professional Photographer
great
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kool11 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014   General Artist
woah
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The-Syreth-Clan Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
So that's how Pluto was made, I get it now...
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Sammyswork Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
okay I giggled you earned my respect ;p
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The-Syreth-Clan Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:thumbsup:
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RubensLilium Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Student Writer
So amazing!
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014
so sparse but interesting. :heart:
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anila73 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is dripping with so much metaphorical resonance i can almost taste it
thank you
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
why are you thanking me?
i should be thanking you, lovely.
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anila73 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you for posting this.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:wow: forever impressed by the strength of your words.
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shep4life Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I never realized until I grew older, that you can slap someone without even touching them. Even more amazing?.... They can slap you back without doing or saying a thing.
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imadori-kyosuke Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautiful!:)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
thank you :thanks:
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imadori-kyosuke Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
your very welcome! i love your work!
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