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i offered salt to the
sea, heat to the sun, and
love to the moon; they
told me, this isn't enough

i offered my soul to
the devil; he said yes,
this will be just fine
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:iconmari-kagelar:
mari-kagelar Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2015
This piece is doing things to my mind! Tomoyo Shy Icon 
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dyuv001 Featured By Owner May 6, 2014
My favourite of all your works, 

What works they are! For I have lost the last hour of my life lost in them. 

An hour I do not want back,

Keep writing, I look forward to reading. 
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MizzTusspot Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, simply.
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Mizu-Hi Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014

Oh dear, your offer to nature is underpriced, your offer to devil is overpriced

But then again, I’m no bargaining master either

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Shriss Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

I like the poem.


Good job!

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:iconhaphazardmelody:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's always easiest to take the wrong path. And it's damn unfair.
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:iconcederlina:
Cederlina Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Haha, I love this.
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:iconfableweaver55:
fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I can't even deal with this. This is just fantastic. You tell tiny little stories in those poems of yours.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
you are far too kind with those comments of yours ;)
but seriously, thank you :thanks:
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Brilliant. Left me with a cold feeling in my heart.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
oh i hope it wasn't too cold :hug:
(thank you so much)
:heart:
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, no. :)
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:iconcaixue:
caixue Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
This made me laugh, thank you.
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:iconwolfnoom:
wolfnoom Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014   Digital Artist
yeah, the devil is a cool guy haha nice one
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:iconkeitone:
keitone Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oaklungs you are so amazing!! You say so much with this!! 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
aww i'm not amazing :blushes: but thank you so much for the kind words :huggle::heart:
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ParadiseFrost Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this 8)
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
i love you 8)
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Jokers-Side Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
Love it.

I know, a reference. >_> But it kind of reminds me of Harry Potter, when Dumbledore says: “Dark times lie ahead of us and there will be a time when we must choose between what is easy and what is right.”

All to easy to just give into the demons or the devil. You try, and work, and give, and in the end sometimes it amounts to nothing.
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imadori-kyosuke Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
your words are chosen so carfuly i love every moment im reading your work it is all so beautiful,i cant help but applaud Clap
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InvaderPhantomstar1 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014
*eeeyyyeee rrrooooolle*
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:iconmightywardog:
mightywardog Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Student Digital Artist
well have fun with that.
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InvaderPhantomstar1 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014
*fist bump*
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Sorosoro Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014
When you try to be good they won't even listen but when you're evil all eyes are on you.
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WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014   General Artist
I love this;
it's short, simple but conveys so much more than what's written in my head
I love poetry that makes me think/reflect :heart:
awesome writing!
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LakeSong Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing. Short and simple, but at the same time, deep and complex. I love it. Truly a work of art.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
thank you so much! :tighthug:
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LakeSong Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Most welcome.
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014   Writer
A poetic notion in the first stanza and an overwhelming realism in the last. A robust piece. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
and thank you for reading! (i know i say thank you a lot, but it would feel rude not to) :giggle:
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014   Writer
You are most welcome ( I also say that a lot, too - but I mean it )
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tuffhoss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes, when they say that the road less traveled is the more difficult one, I think they're wrong; this seems like it would be one of those less-traveled roads, and yet the devil's always willing to make deals.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
sometimes, the road less travelled is often the easiest. it is less travelled for a reason; it's the one you don't want to go down unless you absolutely have to.
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wolfnoom Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014   Digital Artist
you writers like comunicate in abstract ways.
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Aglaismilberti Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
What in return, did you expect?
to give more brine to the ocean?
to return elegant rays by day
and subtle beams by night?

What value is a leaf to the forest?
Who could give a rock more stone?
A deal made with the devil is seldom
a fair trade.
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larance0125 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student General Artist
This was amazing!
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:iconmarmodre:
Marmodre Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
Can you post that? I want to add it to my favourites... 
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Aglaismilberti Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You guys like this stuff? It was just a bit of practice. I'll post them tonight, I have to go to work.
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:iconmarmodre:
Marmodre Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014
It was very enjoyable, especially in this context. As a reply, it was brilliant. Yes, i liked that stuff. 
Have a good day at work!
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:iconaglaismilberti:
Aglaismilberti Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll have to do some response poetry for you. 
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WTD-Q8 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
woooh, this is an awesome, beautifully written respond 
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:iconaglaismilberti:
Aglaismilberti Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I call it response poetry. I actually really hate free verse that's why I'm challenging myself like this.  
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Liz-DarkWarrior Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
really sad in a beautiful way~
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
thank you :thanks:
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:iconanifae:
Anifae Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist

Wow.  Beautiful.

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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
thank you very much :thanks:
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7thCobweb Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014
It's funny, I saw this poem randomly on DA before I even logged in and read the first few lines thinking "reminds me of oaklungs".... just to find out it actually is yours! :heart: Great work as always!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
thank you very much! haha :giggle:
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AngelicxFlame Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Giving things to those that already have it and they reject those gifts. So in desperation of your gifts being accepted, you turn to the one who will strip you of everything.
:heart:
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