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you are a walking
coffin; there are sentences
buried alive inside you, all the
things you could not say

and they will fester there
like maggots, eat you from
the inside out
you get the hammer, i'll get the nails
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srinath-ste-v Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your writing never fails to impress and inspire me... Reminds me of a song called read all about it.
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Etiluos Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
I like to think its also the same with things you have said
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
yes, i think you're right
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Amenarae Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I actually feel this way a lot.
This is marvelous!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
thank you so much!
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TheNascentBottleCap Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
I love this. 
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Cederlina Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Amazing!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
thank you :heart:
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ZeldaVoorhees Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I can feel every bite they take.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
:cling:
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Hong-Kong-Kitty Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You've described in seven lines a feeling I couldn't describe with a thousand words. And you did it with such amazing depth. Well done :D
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NuminousNocturne Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well said….just…well said, my friend.
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It amazes me that you can make such an impact with so few words. Great job, as always
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
thank you! :heart:
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That is me in two verses :| I never defend myself because I'm scared to start chaos, especially since I have roommates right now. It sucks :dead:.
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meldickinson Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Student Writer
the opening line draws the reader in. great images throughout. very haunting. good job :meow:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
thank you so much! :heart:
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seanna Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
simply put.  very good.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
thank you very much :thanks:
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tuffhoss Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So very true, indeed; and most often, these things go with us into our own coffin.
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nyan-chii Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
well, yeah. our bodies are just carcasses carrying us around. you only get one body. and then you die and that's that. 
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Nellie0224 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Couldn't agree more.
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dodd14029 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
True sentiment. I regret not fighting people more than I do not saying things though. 
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LifeIsARazorBlade Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
Magnificent sentiment.
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vanessAAHH Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i like it. obviously a lot of others do too. cool shit, bro.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
thanks!
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Trent-Shadowdragon Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
Well aren't you just a cheery sort.
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WizardHowl10001 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
By far one of my favorites from you :heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
aw thank you :blush:
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KidNecro Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
so deep
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shahzaib52 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
wow... (Y)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
:blushes:
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syzygym Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
I am sending this to a fellow novelist!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
really? i am so happy that you would do such a thing, thank you so much :bucktooth::heart:
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honeyOdew Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Dayum. So good :)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
thank you sir! ;):rose:
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery in itself gives chills! The concept in itself is so brilliantly simple, it's terrifying. 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
aw you're far too kind :giggle:
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Or maybe you are just far too brilliant? :) ~ hehe  Woo! 
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Vanshira Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I have a very difficult time expressing my feelings out loud. I feel this poem.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
i'm glad you can connect with it :thanks:
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Professional
Beautifully constructed and great sentiment. Love this.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
thank you so much :tighthug:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow...strong imagery 
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XG11D Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That is deep....
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SmileRose Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing :+fav:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
thank you so much! :wow:
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SmileRose Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:meow:
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VividDreams13 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist
Poetic and haunting
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