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throw my bones
on the fire just
to warm up your
own

then sit
there and wonder
why you're always
alone
is it a habit does
it run in your blood
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Norrolith Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it. I would say the absence of punctuation is part of it's appeal.
The imagery is good too.
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omnivore7 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014
Impressive rawness....
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shewhoisadreamer Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Student Writer
I think someone's been plagiarising here: pogingbaasis.deviantart.com/ar…
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014
thank you for letting me know! it looks like it's been deactivated though, i guess that's a good thing
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Aochiro Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Student
:heart:
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PaleAuthor Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student Writer
yeah I think it runs in my blood. I don't really like it though :(
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
so your using other people for everything they have... its like a dog eat dog world hah ! i totally relate to that, and I like the rhyming it always gives it an extra taste ;)
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TheGoodWitch Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
I've known these words in action so well.  So many have I stood beside to offer a shoulder or hand to turn around and see my bones on that fire.  It makes me wonder where they are now, but indeed, many folks burn you as well as the ones that should matter away.  They are the ones who deserve to be alone.
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Inevitably-dead Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This one is by far my favorite out of all your writing. So good.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014
thank you so much :thanks: i'm glad you like it! <3
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is just so sinister. And the rhyming really works; I don't usually care for rhyming.
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Brilliant.
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L-Inque Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
fantastic imagery!
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
thank you :heart:
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:iconl-inque:
L-Inque Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :)
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wolfnoom Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014   Digital Artist
what :S
feels like its deep but i dont get it.
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mackattack1991 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The interpretation is fairly easy:
"Throw my bones on the fire" The poet's subject is a selfish individual that does not care about the welfare of others above their own!

"and sit there and wonder..." The subject is oblivious to their own selfish ways. They want friends only for their own selfish gains and don't care when they are hurting people to get what they want!
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kidko123 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Most of her poems are like this,
brief, eternally ephemeral bursts
of somewhat cryptic yet openly hidden passion.
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elksongredfeather Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
well written, so much feeling in just a few words, great work!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
thank you so much! :heart:
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elksongredfeather Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're very welcome :)
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ZeldaVoorhees Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
its amazing how some can be so clueless.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
it is.
but there are some who are well aware of what they're doing.
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:iconzeldavoorhees:
ZeldaVoorhees Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
and yet they continue...
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm favoriting all your poems srry
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
don't apologise! i don't mind at all :huggle:
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Quinchols Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good one! You have just won a follower. :)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
:wow: thank you so much!
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Hong-Kong-Kitty Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I know this girl that always makes me think this. I love the poem by the way! X3
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
 :heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014
:tighthug:
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Biasanti Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
how do you get this font?
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cuterebra Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014
<#tt> TEXT </#TT>
remove the hashtags, it will look like this.
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Biasanti Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
ohhh thank you! ^^
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lux-ex-machina Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
This is so good, you should be proud of yourself for writing this. So many feelings for the reader to tap into with only two sentences.

I connected to this poem instantly. This is what poetry is about.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
these are beautiful words to hear (or read) about my writing.
thank you so much :thanks::heart:
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FlightPixel Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Short but meaningful! :) 
You have a flair for writing! Clap 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
thank you so much!
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imadori-kyosuke Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
your work inspires me to make my own art, even if i don't do good i can still say i tried.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
the fact that my writing inspires you in any way makes me incredibly happy :thanks:
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:iconimadori-kyosuke:
imadori-kyosuke Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i will try my best every day as long as you do!!!!!!!!so go for it!!!!!!!!!1
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IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer

Nicely said!

This reminds me of Narnia lol

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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
thanks!
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IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lotus Bullet; Pink :heartemote: Bullet; Blue You're Absolute Welcome!Bullet; Blue :heartemote: Bullet; Pink Lotus 
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TheAxine Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014
Dear, you have a gift.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
:blushes: thank you..
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lemonmarshmallow Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
Amazing
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
:heart:
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Nellie0224 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
OMG. Your writing is just...
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
:tighthug:
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