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i wanted to bathe
in fire; for the amber tongues
to lick me clean, pure
there is a stain that won't come out
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xXxPixiePopxXx Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Your 15 words have created better imagery, and left a stronger impact on me than most 300-700 page novels I have read. I officially love you.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
er, wow
thank you so much :blush: this means a lot to hear!
(i love you too)
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MyDarkInheritance Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Student Writer
What's interesting is that this is written in past tense. The speaker "wanted to." What disillusioned him/her? Also, "amber tongues" is beautiful imagery.
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Azymic Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
Ahhh but bleach, you see, is only good for the colourless
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Awsome-ninja-necko Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
You are a very creative poet with a different but beautiful view of things there is something about your poetry that gives me waves of feeling and a longing to read more.

You are very talented keep up the good work!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
these are such kind words to hear about my little poems! thank you so much :tighthug: :heart:
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Awsome-ninja-necko Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
Your welcome they're really beautiful! ;-)
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IllusionaryG Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
This is wonderful.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
thank you so much :thanks:
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DarkShadeStar Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student Writer

I can relate to having this feeling.


luv all your poems!!!

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SkyChamber Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
^^What DarkShadeStar said!^^
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DarkShadeStar Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Student Writer
thanks for the llama! :love:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
thank you so much!
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DarkShadeStar Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Student Writer
:love:
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BlueDiamondSnow Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Takes my breath away. For so many reasons, one of which is the imagery. Another is the sound. Love, love, LOVE "lick me clean, pure"-- one of those phrases that you just know descended on a Muse's wing. You have the Gift. No doubt!!
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
hah, scrub myself down with my own ashes
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
your comments are little gems themselves :heart:
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Sydneysarus Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student General Artist
Because fire cannot kill a dragon 
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very good
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014   Writer
Sometimes a stain shall never leave, but only fade. A potent Haiku. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Great job :)
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