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i wanted to bathe
in fire; for the amber tongues
to lick me clean, pure
there is a stain that won't come out
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xXxPixiePopxXx Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Your 15 words have created better imagery, and left a stronger impact on me than most 300-700 page novels I have read. I officially love you.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
er, wow
thank you so much :blush: this means a lot to hear!
(i love you too)
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MyDarkInheritance Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Student Writer
What's interesting is that this is written in past tense. The speaker "wanted to." What disillusioned him/her? Also, "amber tongues" is beautiful imagery.
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Azymic Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
Ahhh but bleach, you see, is only good for the colourless
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Awsome-ninja-necko Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
You are a very creative poet with a different but beautiful view of things there is something about your poetry that gives me waves of feeling and a longing to read more.

You are very talented keep up the good work!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
these are such kind words to hear about my little poems! thank you so much :tighthug: :heart:
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Awsome-ninja-necko Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
Your welcome they're really beautiful! ;-)
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IllusionaryG Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
This is wonderful.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
thank you so much :thanks:
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DarkShadeStar Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student Writer

I can relate to having this feeling.


luv all your poems!!!

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