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when i look back at
the past, she looks  
right back at me

she points at the
future, glint in her eye
she's always gonna fuck things up
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:icongolden-leaves:
Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how you don't title your work.
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JocastaTheWeird Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I feel like 'she' is saying "Okay, so you messed me up. But you still have  a chance to do better up ahead."
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
that is a beautiful way of looking at it.
i love it :heart:
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:iconjocastatheweird:
JocastaTheWeird Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. 8'D Your poem is far more beautiful, though.
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:iconcreataire:
creataire Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
oh, man. this is great.
you can bury her, but she always finds her way to the surface. 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
she does :nod:
(thank you)
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:iconkissysaltcoatedangel:
kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Brilliant, just brilliant my friend! I think I've fainted. I think I've fainted. I think I've fainted. Heart 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014
:blushes: thank you so so much!!
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:iconkissysaltcoatedangel:
kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! Well deserved indeed! :D :D :D 
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:iconchive-turkey:
Chive-Turkey Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
*sigh* if I could bury the past beneath a radioactive mushroom cloud of DOOM I would...
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:icondagothjeff:
DagothJeff Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, it must really, really suck to be you
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
well that's a very specific method of disposal :o
(but it's one i like)
:heart:
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:iconbluediamondsnow:
BlueDiamondSnow Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
so powerful. Walking softly, carrying a big stick. You, with a keyboard.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
i think this is one of the best comments i've ever received
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:iconlilmisspeppy:
LilMissPeppy Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Because that glint means she's up to no good... Clever, very clever. Cunning too. Hmm...
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
she is, she is.
she knows exactly what she's doing, and she always picks the right moment.
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:iconlilmisspeppy:
LilMissPeppy Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Without a doubt. Agreed.
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:iconanila73:
anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
that stupid past
she bites down on me and won't let go
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
i say we join forces and fuck her life up for a change.
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:iconanila73:
anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i'm in, let's make an army
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:icongrusome79:
grusome79 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
I'm in. Moving on well if she lets me go.
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:iconanna-95:
Anna-95 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, thank you for this. I haven't read such a short and simple, yet amazingly good poem, in a long time now. Thank you.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
no, thank you :heart:
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:iconanna-95:
Anna-95 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:hug:
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:icongermsofgermany:
germsofgermany Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
this is a pretty poem
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
thank you :hug:
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:iconsilverittam:
SilverIttam Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student General Artist
Excellent. The first time I read it I got one meaning and the second time I got another. Very nice.
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:iconanila73:
anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
same here. the glint could mean two different things, wow :D
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:iconsilverittam:
SilverIttam Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student General Artist
I know right? It's really cool. ^^
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:iconletmechooseaname:
letmechooseaname Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the poem and the description just added to it :D
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
thank you so much :blush:
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:iconalys2:
alys2 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Professional
its really good!!!!Yasuko Takasu (Fangirling) [V1] Yasuko Takasu (Fangirling) [V1] Yasuko Takasu (Fangirling) [V1] Yasuko Takasu (Fangirling) [V1] Yasuko Takasu (Fangirling) [V1] 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
thank you! :heart:
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student Writer
:clap: Ooh, I love this!
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
i'm glad you like it :hug:
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:icontigabelle:
tigabelle Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
Very nicely succinct! :heart:

(And how did you get that font?)
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
thank you!
(just put < tt > with no spaces before anything you type)
:heart:
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:icontigabelle:
tigabelle Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014
oh awesome, thanks! ^^

also, why are all your poems tilted with full stops?

and, I see you've made front page again! :D 
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somethingsophie Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014   Writer
mmh hey this is lovely.  < 3  i suppose the only place anyone can go is forwards.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
thank you so much :tighthug:
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:iconforeststone:
Foreststone Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have someone like that in my life....:sad:
Here's me though: Run Away 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
well you're wise then :hug:
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:iconforeststone:
Foreststone Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) some people would call it cowardly to run but with people like this, you have to leave them behind or they WILL ruin you :/
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:iconcat3o4:
Cat3o4 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
the past sucks.
i wish i had a shprt term memory sometimes...
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
i agree, i agree... :cling:
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Cat3o4 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle:
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AwesomeTheAmazing Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist
Very lovely.. :heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
thank you so much :blushes:
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:iconawesometheamazing:
AwesomeTheAmazing Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist
:D You're more than welcome!
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
nice
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