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dead flies scatter
the windowsill, their
bodies shrivelled and
dried by the sun

i mourn the spider,
hung with his own web
i bet he felt so fuckin useless
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ManicMeToo Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2015
you have a fabulous way of pulling your reader into the moment, Bravo!
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SecondInfinity Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
These are so good, definitely showing these to everyone I can
I'm so happy to have found one of your poems on the homepage (:
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Professional
This has a "haiku" like, (or Japanese) sense of philosophy to it. A very direct way of expressing meaning.
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i never did understand why dead flies always collect on the windowsill instead of places that made more sense, like spiderwebs that were actually made for catching them, or even a floor where they might drop dead when their time comes

because they only times i've ever seen a dead fly is either after my mother sprays it with lethal spray or on its back on the windowsill
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miodek-pitny Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
That's because they try to get out and they die trying.
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Tobassinesia Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014
I have no idea but dying flies go madder than suicidal moths. They crash into my computer and face screaming, "Kill me now!"

(Not really but you know)
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kmills95 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i like this a lot ^.^
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tiajones Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this reminds me of "tuna fish" by emiliana torrini
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bethcould Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm not usually into poetry but this is fantastic
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successwithhonor Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Student Writer
but. like. this


ugh this is one of my absolute favorites from you thus far :heart:

keep the magic alive :rose:
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downunderrob Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014
Well I won't deny I've felt like that after losing my job. But this guy was self employed...he should have been okay.
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Epicsquirrel Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good writing 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Student Writer
Wow. That last part. Just ties the whole thing up perfectly. :heart:
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animeotaku124 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I don't even read poems, and I stink at making them.  but this is just AWESOME!!
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nomnomisbored Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
agree
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SugaryDeception21221 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I usually hate poems but... This is awesome. xD
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NatsukiAmaya Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so deep... Like, we think life can just go to crap for us humans sometimes, but we never really stop to think about the ironies for any other creature here... This is amazing.
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ShadowsofHome Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Why is this so intriguing to me? I love it. <3 
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Noneednogreed Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
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MehreenFreed Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing.
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SSJCyberSonic Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful.
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SgtPossum Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014
Not sure if ya give a damn, but in that context it's "hanged," not hung.

I liked it, by the way. Black humor, except it's about an arthropod so I'm not sure why I feel for it. Neato.
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ruliance Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you 
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maironmatos Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014
Cool!
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PassionTheKitty Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. This is... Amazing.
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draculabiscuit Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
They way you write is beautiful. Loving each stroke of the key~
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Unique...I wrote a poem about a spider lol
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Devonator4 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Who are you talking about in the description?
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PassionTheKitty Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The spider.
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Devonator4 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks lily, can you say that again without the sarcasm ?
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PassionTheKitty Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's about the spider... I didn't use sarcasm.
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Devonator4 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I know
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Libertades Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh dear this poem is so great and that description makes it all sad, harsh and ironic :XD:
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last-love-song10 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014
You are amazing. That is all.
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014   Writer
You capture a moment here. A very original observation. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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