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he told me prayers
are useless

and if i really want his
forgiveness, i should get on
my knees and beg
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student Writer
this is so fucking powerful.
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SvalaW Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! Breathtaking poem.

It consists of only 5 lines, but somehow it's extremely powerful. Maybe it's the way one has to pause after useless, because then there's a gap between the lines, and that naturally makes you stop for a few seconds before you read on, and in these few seconds you have time to think and wonder 'what will happen now?' It makes you anxious. And with that tight feeling in you gut you read on, and somehow the word 'forgiveness' is extremely harsh and hard, it is like a blow. You can hurt someone pretty badly by denying them your forgiveness...
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Mizu-Hi Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014

So he basically asked a person to pray to him after he said prayers are useless. It's either hypocritical, or it's his way to say your wish will not happen no matter what.



Hey, I've been in comment spree on your poems for some times, please don't mind me :D
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Abby7horizon Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
-To pray and wish are two totally different things- But I think your right about the first one.

This is a very interesting poem. I love how it's short, but meaningful. 
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radhenisar Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
awsome poem
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
thank you :hug:
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tonguebox Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014
this is nifty
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slnmten Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nice!
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Tobassinesia Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014
Daww. :'(

I believe God answers all prayers --
when the time is right.

(Before that, you have to put up with your challenges because they were given to you for a reason)

But then, my outlook on life is often very positive, and not everyone is religious. :XD:
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Dang! Amazing poem!! :D
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This strikes such a chord with me. Excellent work, as always. You always say so much with so few words.
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014   Writer
I suppose sometimes forgiveness must be earned. This is a dynamic poem. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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ghost-of-a-gone-bird Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
ha,what a dick.
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chiselstone Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014

I guess means call for despearate measures

 

 

good write..

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Pereyga Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like
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Devonator4 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love it
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kippytreekojk Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
You shouldn't have to beg for anyone. You're good enough, as you are, but once again, you have a beautiful way with words.
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, fuck him.

...xD

But god, you illustrate so perfectly the sjhdbjhdscbjwdhge,j

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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
whenever i see that you've left me a comment i just wanna :iconsupertighthugplz:
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
aw, shucks -:Glomp:- 
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Miellat Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Writer
I bet my Favorites is already spammed with, like, 20+ of your poems, by now. Every single poem you write is like a huge "whoosh" of realization for me, whether it's sadness, anger, pity, happiness--I don't know, but you have this seriously beautiful tendency of expressing so much in so little words. You are amazing, awesome job! 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
aww thank you so much :thanks: :heart:
this does mean a lot to me.
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Miellat Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome, my dear! :iconyuiglompplz:
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BlueSoulGreenMind Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
Hits hard that one.
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Cheyenne-Rose Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:clap: Your poems are so awesome! Love 
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