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we are one and the
same, that old willow and
me, we stand tall with the
scars that life gave us -

with the names of lovers
carved deep in our limbs,
and old burns from my
dads cigarettes
oh and i'd like to say: fuck you
but i couldn't quite work that in
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keitone Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is so sad.... :( 

 i have this lummp in my throat
it is from your very sad note
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh
I love it
But my only thoughts are "love and "oh"
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your writers comment makes it all perfect :love: and it made me life a bit o.o
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
:giggle: thank you so much!
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
-face palm- I meant laugh, dumb typo o.o

Welcome :hug:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
hehe, it's okay, i know what you meant ;)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014   General Artist
the feels. :heart:
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tigabelle Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
that last stanza got me T.T I can relate with 
"with the names of lovers 
carved deep in our limbs"

>.<
great work once again, superb and touching :heart:
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M-102 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
How do I submit written deviations?
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014
the same way you'd submit a piece of art, except instead of uploading a file you click on 'enter text'
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M-102 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014
Oh.
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djinn98 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014
I liked this poem. It touched several strings within My own being. Thank you.
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Heart WINNER! 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
i giggled.
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chiselstone Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
haha classic  your works  are  exquisite.  :-)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
:blushes: thank you so much
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chiselstone Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
aww Indeed.. Nod 
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the comparison of a human to a tree here
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TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is touching
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like this...I also wrote a poem about a tree :) shep4life.deviantart.com/art/M…
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thekoigirl Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
So perfect. I can really relate to it. Amazing job! 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Writer
Wow, this is a lot of emotion rolled up into one excellent poem. :heart:
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
xD "Fuck you" is hard to work into an elegant poem xD



That last stanza is PERFECT :')
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
i'll do it one day i will :shakefist:
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
xD I'll look forward to that one....


"Roses come in assorted colors
Violets are violet
My poems never rhyme
Fuck you"
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Mackismycat Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is one of my favorites of yours so far, I especially love the last part!
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mystifytheworld Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Writer
this makes me think of something I believe: you need to know BOTH sides of yourself to actually live, regardless of nature
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Devonator4 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good job
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014   Writer
The legitimate nature of this poem is overwhelming. The darkness runs deep. Thankyou for sharing this with us.

Regards,
John.
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This really speaks to me. I can't name any specifics as to why, but I really like it.
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