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i was born with the
cord wrapped tight
around my neck; it
would seem fitting to
die the same way
getting more and more morbid by the day
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:iconceylon-morphe286:
Ceylon-Morphe286 Featured By Owner 1 day ago
I was born with a cord wrapped around my neck too,I ofthen joked that I tried to kill my self before I was born.
My sister was born with her cord around her neck too,and she tried to drown in the fluid before she was born.
Now I think about it, im afraid we are gonna try to kill ourselves again.since the first time failed. :/
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VerityRose Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow. . .wow.
Morbid, as you say, but speaks in leagues and bounds (especially for people with these tendencies or past).

Uh. . .yeah. No words, really.
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Pinkiesdontswear Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
So deep.
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:iconkeitone:
keitone Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
one of the dad's friend's son died the same way and he was supposed to be born just 2 days ago.. 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
that is terrible, i am so so sorry :( :rose:
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:iconkeitone:
keitone Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yea..it is really sad.. he was born with the umbilical cord wrapped around his neck... if the he was born just minutes earlier they may have been able to save him... 

This poem reminded me of Ernest Hemmingway's six word novel... with so few words you could both convey a really deep message that in itself tells a huge story.. 

Your poetry made me cry and laugh and I think its really really wonderful oaklungs! :') 
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Tobassinesia Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
My sister was born with hers wrapped around three times. :o I sure hope she won't die the same way though.
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ShackledKagamine Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014
I'm not much of a dark person, but I quite liked this. Just try not to suffer too much, 'Kay?
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:iconordinary-monster:
ordinary-monster Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
I read somewhere that often best of arts are created through suffering. On one hand it is unfortunate that such depths must be dwelled in, but on the other hand, otherwise there would be a lot less good reading to relate to...
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SkyChamber Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014
Spot on, Ordinary-monster!
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meldickinson Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Student Writer
damn. this is very powerful. i love the imagery and the darkness of the poem. keep it up! and being morbid isnt a bad thing at all :meow:
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Samandra-Chan Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow.. this is so deep, i can see Adele rolling in it.

i have really no words for this.. this is great though!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
haha, i laughed at that :giggle:
thank you so much!
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Unabiding Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What's a poet without at least a dribble of morbidity coursing through their veins?
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
ah, very true ;)
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Unabiding Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:meow:
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magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
what a shitty example of art! this is just selfishness masked as "art" but any idiot can produce something like this.
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ooh-shinyspoon Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014
Then why don't you try, as you prove to be an professional when it comes to spewing nonsense....
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magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014
I'm spewing nonsense? lol my sole argument against this "poem" is better than the poet itself, you peon
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TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You, sir, are an asshole
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:iconmagdalenacaracol:
magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
why, bitch? 'cause I speak my mind? bet you can't chew your way out of a bagel hole much less an argument over the internet, so don't even bother getting into it with me. *you* are the asshole and I'll make you look even worse.

CUNT!!11 see, I can throw names around too, ain't it fun? stupid bitch *smh*
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TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, you're speak of words so eloquently.
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magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014
I am. I am speak of words eloquently.

lol
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:iconthehappy3:
TheHappy3 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah ... "lol".
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TruancyCity Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol chill
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magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
haha but it's true, c'mon *smdh* so many great artists out there not getting enough recognition, it's just a damn shame
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TruancyCity Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
aight keep complimenting them then and leave things u dont like alone
world'll be a far better place
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magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
so u believe in some kind of internet dictatorship? i can say whatever I want wherever I want, esp. if it makes sense, and if nobody commented on things they didn't like there would be no thought stimulation.
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TruancyCity Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ok maybe you didnt read between the lines
your comment to the poem was rude and unnecessary
better? freedom of press is great.
btw internet has been under a subtle "dictatorship" for a while now lolll
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magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
omg get over yourself. obv that's not what I meant, fool. there's a diff between google and facebook tracking everyone's activity and commentators like you on DeviantART telling me I should be quiet :/ who're you fooling?
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TruancyCity Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
#socool #usingthewordfool #bowbeforeme #Iamyourgod #hashtag #amaze
lol check my replies again, "fool", i never once said you should be quiet
tryna fool a kid, that's me
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hrbutunts Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
Its one thing when you comment hating on something, instead of commenting and helping improve it. There is a difference between the two. What is the point of being negative without giving any sort of insight? Help a nigga out.
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magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
ha, I'm not so arrogant to suggest on improvements on something that obv. can't be improved, what am I supposed to suggest, "uh, take a writing class" ...? I get what you're saying but sometimes things are unfixable and to be fair, I gave a reason why I thought it sucked: because it's just a stupid statement of a poem! it's my opinion, and who cares if it's rude? if you can't stand the heat, then why you in the kitchen? i'm not directing this toward you, just to the idea that I should provide insight on something that I clearly think is bad, on the Internet! i mean, if the person posting this is willing to let any old person read the poem and comment, then why punish the commentators? i'm just being myself and i'm not losing face, I don't know anybody on here, I'm not here for friendship, I'm here to look at art
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hrbutunts Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
You make a valid point, of course the critique has every right to express his/her opinion. Honesty is the best policy. I'm not gonna lie, it wasnt amazing either, it can be worked on a lot more or maybe go towards a different idea. But I guess also the fact that anyone can really post here doesn't 100% make them an artist, just someone maybe getting into the field. Either way, its okay to tell people its not good and that it needs to be changed. I guess minds are changed everyday o_o
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choralbandnerd Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
To be fair, people don't necessarily ask to be put on the front page. Although there are some incredible pieces that go unrecognized, it's not necessarily the fault of any poster. For some people, deviantart is just an outlet.
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:iconmagdalenacaracol:
magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
that's true, you're right. i guess that's just the way things work :/
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OliverAntal Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
o.o ........wow xD
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Tux-Prowess Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I'm starting to think astrologically that those with umbilical cords around their necks never wanted to live in the first place.
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:iconskshigan:
SKShigan Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
Sad, but true in more than one way... :clap:
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Randomnessgirl101 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
... :'( I just... I I like this... but I am so saddened by it... <3
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abrizelle Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful and so, so sad. 
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BruiseViolet01 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
This is interesting. It sounds like it could make great song lyrics.
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kippytreekojk Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
Chilling, but still gorgeous, your talent for writing amazes me.
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:iconthroughshining:
Throughshining Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
My new favourite writer on dA, without a doubt.
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Gravity-bolt Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
and then it would once  again be tooken off the second time because the reason why it was around your'e neck was to be tooken off so you can be alive. nice font though
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DEXMANIPS Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014
this is stunning. i adore the reminder that life and death are so closely related
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
a tad macabre lol
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shallowknight Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is exactly what happen when i was born. thanks you for reminding me what death I have faced.

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:iconjohnashleigh:
JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014   Writer
An overwhelming sense of darkness and despair. Powerful writing. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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Shir0gane Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014   Writer
love this! ♥
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