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the shadows bruise the
sunlight while the moon
weeps in the darkness
shut your eyes moon, go to sleep
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HumanScolopendra Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's one of the strongest poems I read on here
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014
thank you :blushes:
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014   Writer
I always love how your words seem so fragile, but a strenght somehow slumbers just beneath - a delicate balance you've simply mastered :heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
this is beautiful, thank you so much :thanks:
it made me smile :blush:
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014   Writer
Ah, I'm glad, 'cause I could not have meant it more :heart:
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SyaraSirene Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
So beautiful, yet it has a sad and fragile tone to it.
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BlueDiamondSnow Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love this. You are the master of short and powerful.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
thank you so much! :thanks: :heart:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
wow
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
:thanks:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
thank you so much :heart:
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
no problem. :)
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Pokepower888 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very good ^^
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
thank you!
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HungerGamesFan10 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Simple. But beautiful.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
thank you so much.
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carusmm Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The only true reality is poetry.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
:heart:
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SHIVAM1008 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Student Artist
yeah , its a good 1 .
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
:hug:
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GypsyTrail Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist
I'm too much of a realist to enjoy this but it's still very pretty.

Nice one.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
thank you very much!
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
let the restless moon be


she wishes for light
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
that is rather lovely <3
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8Volaticus8 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the imagery in this poem :) A small thought though. It feels like four "the" is too many in a poem containing only twelve words. I notice you have four words and five syllables in each line. Was that intentional? If not, I think you could easily edit out a few "the"s. Just a suggestion of course, it's your poem. Thanks for sharing :)
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IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Short but great!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
thank you! :thanks:
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IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! How are you?BUBU the Bunny 
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014   Writer
Undeniably evocative. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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Devonator4 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Poor moon XD
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katE4thewin Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Student Writer
i don't how you manage to write such beautiful and deep poetry all the time! ^^
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
aww thank you :blushes:
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Student Writer
5, 5, 5.

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