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they say that you are the
work of the devil; you'll have
black orbs for eyes and a tongue
as sharp as your fathers

and i hope you will not feel a thing
when they pull back your blankets
and carry you out, when they leave
me with nothing but creases
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Amenarae Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Is this about... Pregnancy from rape? (Not sure why, but that was what came to mind...)
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Owna965 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Im not sure if I get it or not, but I feel like a lot has been said here
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really enjoyed this...
But, the 'is' in the line "as sharp as your fathers is"
kind of threw off the rhythm for me,
I think it's read smoother when 'is'--is removed. :)

"black orbs for eyes and a tongue
as sharp as your fathers"

:heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
i know what you mean, it's been bugging me too. i think i'll take it out :)
i'm glad you like it though, thank you :heart:
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TheRealDeidara29 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
very powerful :clap:
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ghost-of-a-gone-bird Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
sad storyHeart wonderfully written.
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WilliamDallwitz Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student General Artist
lovely
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Probably your longest poem. ;)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
it feels scary to type something longer than say, five lines :worry:
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anila73 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well you didn't fail c:>
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