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the sea spits
me back onto
the shore -

the waves say
this is not the
right tide, the
right time
and i can't go against it
no
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BlissBaby13 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Student General Artist
It sounds so fresh and honest and - what I love most - lyrical. The last two lines make it for me. I love the way you write...!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
thank you so much! :thanks:
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BlissBaby13 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Student General Artist
No problem! <3
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is simple and expressive. I like the theme and how you have portrayed it. The expanse of expressions and interpretations out of this can be huge - not necessarily a good thing so I cannot decide if any further addition would have made this more interesting and pleasurable to read or would have diminished its feel.

Over all a fine work.
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Cederlina Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Beautiful!
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AkiIsAwesome42 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This makes me wonder so many things, what caused them to go into the ocean in the first place, why it's not the right time, what they're going to do now ..... beautiful capture of a moment. The ambiguity of the circumstances magnifies this part of the bigger picture (if there is one). 
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DaughterOfTheForests Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This one is great - very inspiring! Heart 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
thank you so much! :blush:
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Rosella-of-Daventry Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love when I see a story and I see a character! This is just awesome, literally. :rose:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014
you are so kind, thank you so much :blushes:
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