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you should have
emerged with life; your
little roots should have
clutched the soil in their
tiny white fists, and
grown

i did not mean to trample
you, i did not mean to
let my body kill
your body
i had a dream for you
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Basmah999 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
truth.
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MixedSunlight Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
 Your poems are so short, but they carry so much emotion, so much feeling, that they can affect the reader.

Well done.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
thank you for these kind words :thanks::heart:
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MixedSunlight Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014   General Artist
you know how to make me crumble, dearling :huggle:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so incredibly sad. :hug:
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Cleft-Palette Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist
Your descriptions are at times, just as relevant and backed with feeling as your actual pieces.
This is very sweet, and rather sad. Good.
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Professional
Poignant. The affect we have on everything rippling around us. Beautifully stated with an economy of word which intesifies the expressiveness.
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CurtainRodFace Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, goodness... This makes me think "miscarriage" and it is one of the saddest things I've ever read...
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BlueSoulGreenMind Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014
"I meant to be everything but a weed."
Is what came to mind as I read it. This was sad but felt good.
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013   Writer
Your wonderful work has been showcased here: fav.me/d707vjx  
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014
:tighthug:
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014   Writer
Big Hug 
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wei-en Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013
Ah. Very emotional, the helplessness and almost panicked sorrow comes through thickly.
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013   Writer
An incredibly cogent and bold write. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John
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anila73 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
your words just bleed emotion. i can feel the pain, the regret, the sorry.... ugh.
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ExpressKeeluh Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful :heart:
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Pandalings Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is my favorite...
Doing a feature journal of you oh my goodness
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sootandcinders Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Student Writer
wonderful :heart:
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antipoetic Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013
ugh god, this <3
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Saiionji Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013
Wonderful, as always.
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