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i will bury myself
outside in the garden;
like the spare key
or the dead dog,
i'm never there when
you need me
haha
ha fucking ha
i got shut out of my house today
and also i miss my dog
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:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Student Writer
you knock me sideways
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:iconemsoileau:
emsoileau Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
that is the poignant-est of short shit i have read in an age.
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successwithhonor Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Student Writer
:heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013
i don't know why precious things get lost.
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:iconsuccesswithhonor:
successwithhonor Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Student Writer
it's because we start to forget their preciousness,
we must learn to love the ordinary
for it too can be beautiful
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SpiderwebWisher Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Speechless.
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:iconphinx400:
phinx400 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
kinda shite
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:iconjohnashleigh:
JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013   Writer
A sharp despondency. An effective piece. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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MutePoetess Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm really sorry about you getting shut out of your house, and about your dog. This is a lovely (and sad) poem though. I really like it, and I can relate to the feeling, I think. It's very simple but it conjures up a lot of feelings. Good writing.
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FridayatMidnight Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This kinda made me laugh xP
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:iconriventear:
RivenTear Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
Well, that's what I call an interesting combination... a key and a dog, both missing, but in different ways.
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:iconitaly4eva:
italy4eva Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful.
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:iconamavelredentor:
AmavelRedentor Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
Really good, thank you.
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:iconanoushaykhan:
AnoushayKhan Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
<3
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AzhaqofPahang Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Student Photographer
I know this will get lost in the deviantart comments, but sometimes when my mom isn't home, I go to the garden and I cover myself in dirt and pretend to be a carrot
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Talvieno Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks for making today better for me. lol
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themeepynerd Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You, sir, are a national hero.
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MeChan2669 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this comment made my day XDDD
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:iconsdbennett:
SDBennett Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
'tis sad... and don't do like I did and bury yourself too deeply.
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:iconcaffeine-dreams:
Caffeine-Dreams Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
So concise but says it all. Like it very much. Especially the images of something hidden underneath all that earth in the garden, kind of nostalgic.
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NutHun Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
i like it ! sorry about the keys tho lol
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:iconsirringe:
SirRinge Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Wow. That makes a lot more sense now...
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SinnerDom Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
yeah...
All my exes ex's how do you spell that anyway?
would agree..
yeah..that's what he did.
never there..
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AwesomeTheAmazing Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist
I love this.  I preferred it when it had an impersonal personal touch (if that makes sense)...... (ie, before I read your artist comment and I had it related to my life only) but even still with your personal swing to it (quite a literal twist, too=P) it is great.  I love it.  
Sorry about the house.  And your dog as well :(
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Kreatress Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ouchie
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Rosella-of-Daventry Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
For crying out loud! I don't know what it is, but I have loved everything you've ever written! You're fantastic to me. :rose:

And our dogs are too loyal to ever leave us completely. :tighthug:
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:iconvaunted-aura:
vaunted-aura Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Student Writer
teach me how to write like you
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:iconaway-with-knives:
aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Learn to hold yourself to your own standard
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magdaIine Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
one time i got locked out of my house and i had to sit on the front porch in the pouring rain for two hours waiting for my mom to come home and yeah i got frostbite so that was fun
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Student General Artist
You coulda worked on your grammar, you know
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magdaIine Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oH WOW YOU ARE JUST SO FUNNY THAT FUCKING CRACKED ME UP THANK YOU.
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DobbysCookieSock Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You know what I just thought ?
Somebody who writes 'coulda' should not be allowed to write a comment like that :rofl:
Seriously.
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Satire, meatbag.
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DobbysCookieSock Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, Satire is funny. In some way. You're just impolite and dumb ;)
But yea... Arguing with a sheep will never turn out any good.
So I will quit that now xD
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anila73 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this just speaks to me.

:hug:
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thedirestraits Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
THIS IS AWESOME AND CLEVER.
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skies-will-fall Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i love this one 
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