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a spider weaves
his silver lies on my
front door, and i
walk right in;
the flies laugh
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srinath-ste-v Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i love the raw unspoken beauty to it ...
weaving a trap of lies..nice
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:icongolden-leaves:
Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hate when that happens...
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:iconordinary-monster:
ordinary-monster Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014
I know that people tend to believe in lies they wish were true and go for even the small gain they think there is for themselves, regardless of what happens after that. I also know that sometimes one just cannot see a lie as a lie although everyone else does. But I do not know what kind of diet would help me to come up with such elegant imagery myself...
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:icontobassinesia:
Tobassinesia Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014
Why does the spider weave lies? :noes:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014
it's in his nature.
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:icontobassinesia:
Tobassinesia Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014
Some of my spiders weave lies. Some of them weave truth. It's hard to tell the difference between the two until I take a closer look.
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:iconsoralove:
SoraLove Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Wow, your poems are so amazing! I love how you write! Keep it up!!
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014
thank you so much! this means a lot to me :tighthug:
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:icontristancody:
TristanCody Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Student Writer
I have to ask how you come up with these! It's just so human. The way you make the flies represent us when we notice how stupid we are for just walking right into these spider liars is just brilliant. 
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:icontasldaed:
TasLDaeD Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this, so beautifully done. 
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Lunarwing59 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Short and sweet~ Just how I like my poetry

Very nice! :D
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
thank you very much :thanks:
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:iconlunarwing59:
Lunarwing59 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
No problem!
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:iconivy--the--hedgehog:
Ivy--The--Hedgehog Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
:thanks:
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:iconivy--the--hedgehog:
Ivy--The--Hedgehog Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
^^
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student Writer
pretty!
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
thank you!
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:iconla-tete-ailleurs:
La-Tete-Ailleurs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
:thumbsup:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
:thanks:
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frosts Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
His silver lies - I love that line!

A very vibrant poem!
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
thank you very much! :thanks:
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:iconcskadoz:
cskadoz Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013   General Artist
:clap: x 1000 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
:tighthug:
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merupuri2583 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student Artist
Awesomely written:happybounce:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
thank you so much :tighthug:
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:iconmerupuri2583:
merupuri2583 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Student Artist
You're welcome!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student Writer
:heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
:hug:
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Student Writer
:huggle:
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:iconxmajutsu-shix:
XMajutsu-shiX Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Why do I like this so much?
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
i'm not sure, but i'm glad that you do :thanks: :heart:
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ah yes :D
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914four Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:clap:
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:icongrimnark:
Grimnark Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Someone explain this?
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:iconal3xdk:
Al3xDk Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
This is genious! :la:
You're a true artist :clap:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
aw thank you so much! :thanks:
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:iconal3xdk:
Al3xDk Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013
You're welcome :hug:
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carusmm Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Silver lies we all run into and wipe away.
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mynameishussam Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
This is beautiful. Can I fall in love with you? :)
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SSJCyberSonic Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very nice.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
thank you!!
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:iconwickedegg:
WickedEgg Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
ouch, this makes me think of sad things :( beautifully written though, it is very strong :)
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
thank you :thanks:
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:icondead-m3m0ries:
Dead-m3m0ries Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
this is brilliant

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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
thank you!
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:iconbluerosekelly:
BlueRoseKelly Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Never really amusing. ^^;
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
those pesky webs :shakefist:
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:iconbluerosekelly:
BlueRoseKelly Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
Indeed. XD
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Suljak Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Honestly, I'm just so glad that I have you on watch now. I love these poems that you do, they just make me so happy. I wish I could make words flow half as well as you can, but since I can't, I will follow you while you do what I can't. Gorgeous work. <3
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