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crescent moon- silver
hook in the sky fishing for
stars; you catch my eye
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:icondartmoth:
dartmoth Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Student Writer
Or a silken thong...unashamed of spectators.
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cattservant Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2015
a moment's
metaphorical
beauty
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shewhoisadreamer Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Writer
This is perfect.
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DeriveAnemone Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This embodies everything I love about haikus. Heart 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
:tighthug:
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Student Writer
I relate to this poem every clear night when the stars droop down to say hi and I'm just there in my human pleasure with a coffee cup. 

Love this. 
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013   Writer
That. Is. Truly. Beautiful :heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
aww thank you :tighthug:
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carusmm Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
emotive, poetic.
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chewyraezen Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i don't know what the reader before me was talking about. this is beautiful as it is. the line breaks are perfect, the emphasis exactly where it needs to be. a wonderful haiku!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013
thank you very much :thanks:
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:iconchewyraezen:
chewyraezen Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh you are so welcome! you have a gift, you truly do. it takes me a lot of words to try to express myself. you use much less and you have more impact, a perfect punch!
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013
I love the imagery but struggle with the line breaks-
is it just to fit the 5-7-5?
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bubbleXteaX123 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, thank you for uploading this. It's lovely. I don't usually see a lot of poetry on DA that I enjoy, so I was very surprised to click on something like this. Quaint, but somehow also expansive. Thanks again for sharing it here.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013
no thank YOU for taking the time to read it! :thanks:
and thank you so much for the kind words :heart:
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bubbleXteaX123 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No problem! I was just really struck by it, so I wanted to let you know! :D
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
all these short pieces you do are just incredibly striking and unique.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013
thank you so much 0:blushes:
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delirious-eyes Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is beautiful and brilliant and ughghhhhhh Heart Heart  
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
thank you :love::heart:
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:icondeclanewan123:
declanewan123 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
rhyme
mmmmm
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
do rhymes taste good?
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:icondeclanewan123:
declanewan123 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
not as good as you
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overtsexualized Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're always so sharp and witty, I love it ^.^
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
aww thank you :tighthug:
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PaperAnomaly Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely~ :heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
thank you :thanks:
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timeless-forever Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
So simple yet great :) I want to be able to write well like you one day. 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
thank you so much :blush:
you are far too kind :tighthug:
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Sparkleno Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
so lovely!
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
thank you! :heart:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Student Writer
I think I've said this before, but your poetry is so lovely... So simplistic, but powerful. :heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
aww thank you :blushes:
(i'm sure i've said that before too! :heart:)
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Student Writer
:huggle:
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Nimine54 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't understand how words can be so beautiful. 
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
:huggle: :heart:
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Nimine54 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
c:>
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013   Writer
A picturesque Haiku. This is charming. Thankyou for sharing this accomplished poem.

Regards,
John.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
and thank you for the lovely compliment :thanks:
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:iconjohnashleigh:
JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013   Writer
It is deserved.
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