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hangman, could you show
me the ropes? i'd rather do
it all on my own
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wxnderlust Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're extremely talented wow. I adore every single poem you wrote, everything is just brilliant, I don't even have words. :heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014
you are seriously such a sweetheart, thank you so much :tighthug::rose:
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... so expressive. One if the best haikus I have ever read. <3
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
thank you so much :blushes:
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome :)
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Why so clever but so sad? Still love it. :)
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Nanushii Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013
<3
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014
:heart:
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TrappedLyrix Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Student Writer
I read that and it just brung me to tears, this is saddening and it has a lot of emotion put into it. Just a few simple words could describe so much. I love it. I've read a few of your other short poems and they really are amazing.  Happycry revamp 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014
thank you so much :thanks: :heart:
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mynameishussam Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
Yeah, me too.
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saudade-nebuloso Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
This is beautiful in such a haunting way..
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
thank you :thanks:
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013   Writer
I get a strong sense of despondency here. This Senryu is refreshing. I have never read anything like it. I am impressed. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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q-u-w Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
oh dear..
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AKsroa4a Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013   Writer
It's amazing how you crafted so few words into something that really speaks thousands. Perhaps that's the sign of great writing. :j
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013
thank you so much for this lovely compliment :thanks:
it means a lot to me :huggle:
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hannahdaye123 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013
i think this might be one of my favorite poems ever
youre extremely talented
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013
thank you so much :blushes:
i'm glad you like my poem :tighthug:
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Randomnessgirl101 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the thought provocing nature of this. It's short simple and to the point and not at all wishy washy.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
thank you!
i'm happy you like it! :giggle:
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Randomnessgirl101 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
or sentamental. 
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AngelBunnyXOXO Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
dont do it man
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lovebirds9988 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013

That's deep man

that's deep

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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
:hug:
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Mrs-SaxoBeat Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Simple yet very powerful :) :heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
thank you :thanks:
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mangosquirrel Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
i love this more than i should.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
i am glad you like it :tighthug:
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shipwreck-stars Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013

Darkly witty and amusing.


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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
:thanks:
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shipwreck-stars Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
:happybounce:
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Smkiller Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist
I don't normally favorite any literature on this site, but I have to in this case. Short, but clever. Love it.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
gah, thank you so much! :hug: :heart:
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xXNamaste Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
perfect.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
:huggle: thank you
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faunie Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
<3
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
:rose:
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khvlid Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student General Artist
Stay.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
i'm here.
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khvlid Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student General Artist
<3
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PlatinaStar Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Clever.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
thank you :)
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jswebb Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013   Writer
Not so much a haiku as a free verse poem conforming to predisposed English haiku syllabic count, but the message is potent nonetheless. I do enjoy the pun with the ropes - that double entendre really opens the work up for interpretation.
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Throughshining Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
I don't see the double entendre, could you elaborate?
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jswebb Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013   Writer
(1) "Show me the ropes" - An idiom meaning 'teach me the basics of a job or activity.'

(2) An actual hangman showing the narrator the rope one will inevitably be hanged with.

While (1) is what is probably prima facie meant and recognized by the reader, (2) offers a concrete image that makes the piece more chilling.
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Throughshining Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
Me not being a native English speaker explains why I missed the (1), I've never heard of the phrase before. :) Thanks!
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jswebb Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013   Writer
You're welcome! :)
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rose3709 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
love this very clever!!
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
thank you so much :)
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