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horrors prey on
dreams, and sleep can
do nothing about it

a lamb strays
from the flock;
a wolf grins
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
while nightmares are what first comes to mind, there is something greater in this particular "dot". Here, the idea is a portrayal of us reliving our sorrow and our loneliness, which is the inevitable leading of our demise. We want to escape that vicious cycle, and break free from all those "horror" which have rotted away our "sleep" (i.e. plagued our minds, destroyed our thoughts, made us incapable and vulnerable) and this has led us astray from the "flock" (i.e. our sanctuary, our home). Which is why the wolf "grins". Frankly speaking, it reminded me strongly of KathrynODriscoll. Just wound up feeling as if the theme here - which I view as rape and subjugation - is written well in two stanzas.

Nicely done.
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carusmm Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am prey to bad dreams.
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chewyraezen Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wonderful! almost biblical, not in a religious sense but metaphorically. we are all lambs straying from the flock. 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013
something that also occurred to me while writing it :nod:
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Professional Writer
I like the depth. This has strength and meaning. The best poem I have read on DA so far. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
wow, thank you so much! this means a lot to me :hug:
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
that last stanza.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013
:huggle:
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anila73 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
perfect timing.
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goats Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
"a lamb strays
from the flock;
a wolf grins"

perfect 
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