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in the night
time you are
better; moonlight
embroiders your
skin and stitches
you up with a
purer love, until

the morning comes,
the sun runs his
teeth through your
seams again, splits
you open
forgive me
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love how this poem embraces night and then points out that in the daylight, it is so much harder to hide anything from yourself. :heart: Usually I think, as poets, we tend to feel the other way around. So I love this spin on it. (I really hope this comment is making sense.)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014
it makes perfect sense, don't worry :hug:
i'm really glad you like it!
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SpazTomato Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing...
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
aw, thank you :tighthug:
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formaniac Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Student Writer
This, like nearly all your work, rings astoundingly true~
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Pinkey-pie-69 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Student General Artist
wow, that was really beautiful and moving, simple, yet not overly so, and the over all tone of the piece was mournful, yet loving. This really peaked my interest, if you don't mind sharing, what is the story behind this poem?
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
thank you so much for the kind words :thanks:
(i suppose it's a comparison between the two types of love, the healthy and the unhealthy)
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oh dear,I am falling for your wordsHeart
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
aww i don't know what to say :thanks: :heart:
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