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she calls down angels
just to burn their
righteous wings,
to see them rise then
fall, those flailing
doves

she tells them, this
is what it's like
to be human

and they say judgement
will arrive for you, my
girl, you will be
cleansed by burning
light

and i strike another match
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haphazardmelody Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is just so powerful. And that last line is just perfect. (Am I correct in assuming that the last line used to be in the author's comments? I was snooping through the other comments here...lol.)
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:iconoaklungs:
yes it did :P
it originally ended after 'to be human'
and the rest was the authors comments. after i'd written the description i did think about adding it to the poem, but submitted the shorter version. and then someone suggested i add it so i did aha :hug:
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haphazardmelody Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh okay I see. Yes, that last stanza and then the closing line definitely make this. :hug:
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:iconbiasanti:
this. is. the truth. of life.
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:iconseilf:
Seilf Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
TRUTH.
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:iconkippytreekojk:
I had to read this several times. It was gorgeous, I love you're style of poetry !
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:iconoaklungs:
aw thank you so much :thanks: i'm glad you like it! :heart:
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:iconlady-yume:
Ohmy. That last sentence. Brilliant. :heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
thank you so much :thanks: :heart:
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chewyraezen Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
are you her judgement or is it divine energy, god if you will? 
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