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she calls down angels
just to burn their
righteous wings,
to see them rise then
fall, those flailing
doves

she tells them, this
is what it's like
to be human

and they say judgement
will arrive for you, my
girl, you will be
cleansed by burning
light

and i strike another match
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Nutcase9 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Student General Artist
God is cruel, long live Satan.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is just so powerful. And that last line is just perfect. (Am I correct in assuming that the last line used to be in the author's comments? I was snooping through the other comments here...lol.)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014
yes it did :P
it originally ended after 'to be human'
and the rest was the authors comments. after i'd written the description i did think about adding it to the poem, but submitted the shorter version. and then someone suggested i add it so i did aha :hug:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh okay I see. Yes, that last stanza and then the closing line definitely make this. :hug:
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Biasanti Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
this. is. the truth. of life.
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Seilf Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
TRUTH.
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kippytreekojk Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013
I had to read this several times. It was gorgeous, I love you're style of poetry !
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013
aw thank you so much :thanks: i'm glad you like it! :heart:
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013   Writer
Ohmy. That last sentence. Brilliant. :heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
thank you so much :thanks: :heart:
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