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fists
clench; i brush my
heart from
my sleeve, then
ditch the
sweater
my brain keeps tainting things
how do i stop it

how the fuck do i stop it
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SteampunkSoldiers Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
How do you stop your brain from tainting things?
You don't.
And the more you try, the worse it gets.
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declanewan123 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013
i want to say this is cliche but what i mean is poetic but a mixture of the two... it's out dated god im being so negative what i mean is you're good but im better haha no it's late and i have no idea what im saying it's a really good poem imagination wise it reminds me of this girl i met in hospital. xxx
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declanewan123 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013
clichely poetic in a good way
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BlastProcessedLawl Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*poetically cliché

I could carry into your grammar and such, about how you dared to compare yourself to someone else, let alone rank yourself above them, but...I don't feel like arguing on someone else's comment section. Also, if you're going to call something "cliché," elaborate a little more than vague sentences that basically beat around the bush that you really don't have a reason to claim that.
From a literary perspective, your comment rustled me. Sorry.
Not really, but sorry.
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declanewan123 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014
whoa i uh couldnt find the right words to say i like it.....
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declanewan123 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013
maybe sentimental is the right word
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
Sweaters are itchy anyway.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
:nod:
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ohanthem Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love the imagery in this.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
:hug:
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