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when her love left, it left
the house empty

and she says
i hope one day it'll
come back to me,
cos i don't keep this shotgun
on my front porch for nothin'
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2014
Hilarious.
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love how you violate the dumb stereotypes about waiting for someone who doesn't love you anymore. This is much better :giggle:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here. Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014
thank you so much!! :heart:
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
half way through i was like
well she should love herself
you know?

and then -
that plot twist at the end gave
this poem a much darker bend.
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goodbyeafterglow Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Professional Writer
that's an awesome image. you don't waste words, they all are just right for the maximum power
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my gosh. so eloquent and raw and moving. you are so talented :heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013
thank you so much :heart::giggle:
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asecretoutlet Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013
you are so freakin' good you lil jerk
when are you publishing a book of poems? I will buy it. I'm serious B)
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
thanks you lil jerk ;) 

a few people have said this to me, but i honestly have no idea how to even go about it. it's something i might consider looking into though!
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
reminds me of Lady A's "Love Don't Live Here Anymore" :heart:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
just listened to it, and i'm so glad i did :wow:
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
one of my favorite groups, and i'm glad you liked it ^^ but this is super amazing all by itself <3
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pepper131361 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
digg itt (:
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
glad you like it! ;)
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pepper131361 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
(:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Student Writer
Whoa, plot twist!
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
:giggle:
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flummo Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Student Writer
:giggle: :clap:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
:blush:
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GypsyMountainman Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Professional Writer
So true.  So true.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
:hug:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: That was a very clever little twist there. 
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
thank you :tighthug:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :heart:
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forever-or-yesterday Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013
this is so perfect, oh my gosh.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
:thanks:
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Summonaconjurer Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013
so clever haha
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
thank you :hug:
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013
Nice twist. :) You're pretty good with the surprise endings.
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:iconoaklungs:
oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
thank you! :huggle:
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
Welcome!
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love this. :squee-love: - PLZ
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
i'm glad you like it :tighthug:
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, a twist! :)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013
:giggle:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Niiiiiice. :)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013
hehe, something a little different i thought ;)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha. :)
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