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when her love left, it left
the house empty

and she says
i hope one day it'll
come back to me,
cos i don't keep this shotgun
on my front porch for nothin'
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love how you violate the dumb stereotypes about waiting for someone who doesn't love you anymore. This is much better :giggle:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here. Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014
thank you so much!! :heart:
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
half way through i was like
well she should love herself
you know?

and then -
that plot twist at the end gave
this poem a much darker bend.
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goodbyeafterglow Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Professional Writer
that's an awesome image. you don't waste words, they all are just right for the maximum power
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my gosh. so eloquent and raw and moving. you are so talented :heart:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013
thank you so much :heart::giggle:
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asecretoutlet Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013
you are so freakin' good you lil jerk
when are you publishing a book of poems? I will buy it. I'm serious B)
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
thanks you lil jerk ;) 

a few people have said this to me, but i honestly have no idea how to even go about it. it's something i might consider looking into though!
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
reminds me of Lady A's "Love Don't Live Here Anymore" :heart:
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