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a lover leaving his
home for another, a spark
that becomes a flame
(yeah i fucking knew it)
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tiajones Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
if you make it "a lover leaves" it'd be a haiku, i think.  (:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
you're right! now why didn't i see that :(
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tiajones Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you can always go back and change it, if you'd like to.
(:
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RainyhawaiiV2 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This fucking scares me...
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
what is it that's scaring you?
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RainyhawaiiV2 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I guess it's... a little too fresh. 
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ouch. this hit pretty close to home for me right now. who knew such emotion could come from so few words?

this is fantastic.
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
thank you so much :tighthug: i'm glad you like it!
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
it's wonderful in ever sense of the word :hug:
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GypsyMountainman Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Professional Writer
this one makes me sad
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
me too, me too :(
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Miellat Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Student Writer
I love your work, like, all the time You have such a beautiful way with words :heart: :iconheartrollplz:
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013
and your lovely comments make me so happy!
thank you so much!!
:icondweebdanceplz:
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Miellat Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome! :iconyuihugplz: :heart:
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
the way this is written sounds like cheating
depends on interpretation i suppose.

 i see it as - a lover is away from his love or her
love and leaves her/his home for a new one
(to be) with that lover. almost a rite of passage?

and their spark gives birth to the flame once united.
does that makes sense? this is gorgeous
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oaklungs Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013
i understand, that makes perfect sense :) you are spot on.
i'm glad you like it :hug:

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